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Revising: for Consistency, Parallelism, & Sentence Variety
Joanelle Moraleson 12 November 2012
Transcript of Revising: for Consistency, Parallelism, & Sentence Variety
Practice 1 & 2. Tense, Number, & Person. Read p. 315
Practice 10. Parallelism/Parallel structure adds
smoothness and power to your writing. Why is this important? Sentence Variety
3 common confusing shifts:
1. in tense
2. in number
3. in person Why is this important? 2. Read p. 310. Practice 6.
3. Read p. 312.
THIRD PERSON is often the best choice for academic writing. (Why?)
Practice 7. I am happy to join with you today in what will go down in history as the greatest demonstration for freedom in the history of our nation.
Five score years ago, a great American, in whose symbolic shadow we stand today, signed the Emancipation Proclamation. This momentous decree came as a great beacon light of hope to millions of Negro slaves who had been seared in the flames of withering injustice. It came as a joyous daybreak to end the long night of their captivity.
But one hundred years later, the Negro still is not free. One hundred years later, the life of the Negro is still sadly crippled by the manacles of segregation and the chains of discrimination. One hundred years later, the Negro lives on a lonely island of poverty in the midst of a vast ocean of material prosperity. One hundred years later, the Negro is still languishing in the corners of American society and finds himself an exile in his own land. So we have come here today to dramatize a shameful condition. How to vary your sentences:
1. Mix long and short sentences.
2. Occasionally use questions, commands, or exclamations.
3. Vary the beginnings of sentences. (How?) a. Begin with an adverb.
b. Begin with a prepositional phrase.
4. Vary methods of joining ideas. (How?) a. Use a compound predicate. Practice 8.
b. Use an -ing modifier. Practice 11.
c. Use a past participial modifier. Practice 14 & 16.
d. Use an appositive. Practice 17.
e. Use a relative clause. Practice 19 & 20.
--REMEMBER: "That" does not use a comma. "Which" does.
AVOID misplaced and confusing modifiers.