F20CEC14- Part 3

Hi, everyone.

Welcome back to Lesson 14 Part three.

Now, in the last last part of part two, we

were talking about the assignment and talking about the the

thesis sentence that you're going to write and how it

has those two parts.

It has the main idea and has the controlling idea

and again, only one controlling idea.

One main idea.

And the main idea is going to be your choice

of one of the four articles or one of the

four topics in the articles, and it's gonna have your

opinion, whether it's critical or positive or in between.

That's tze gonna be your opinion with the topic as

the main idea.

And then your thesis will have one controlling idea, which

is going to again show or tell in many, many

different details in Paragraph two.

It's going to talk about why you have that opinion.

Okay, eso looking more closely now.

If you look in the CSP, you can see that

for writing number two.

This is actually a persuasive essay.

It's a reaction.

It's a reactive essay, a response essay, but it tze

persuasive. You're trying to get the the listener, the reader

Thio agree with you or to understand at least your

opinion and why you have it.

Okay, so this is meant to be persuasive.

It's a three paragraph essay and it will be done

with two drafts, the same as writing number one.

So you're going to do a rough draft, send it

to me, and then I'm going thio, give some feedback

and send it back to you, and you're going to

correct it and and turn in a final final version

just like you did for writing one.

Okay, um just like writing one.

I have an example here of what it should basically

look like in terms of where things should be.

And this is something that you need to pay attention

to very, very closely because it's different than writing one,

because this is an essay, not a paragraph.

And this is something that a number of students had

had trouble with in writing number one.

And this is more, you know, writing an essay is

more complex than then, of course, in writing one paragraph.

But it's like I said, it's basically the same thing

you have.

You had three parts in writing.

Number one in your paragraph.

You had a topic sentence.

You had all the support in the middle, and then

you had a concluding sentence.

Okay, well, if you just expand that and open that

up, then you'll see in writing number two with an

essay. You're gonna have the same thing in these right

in these three paragraphs.

Paragraph number one up here on the top.

Paragraph number one, If I can get in there Closer

paragraph number one is going to be include in the

yellow. It's going to include basically ah, topic sentence for

the essay, but we don't call that a topic sentence

for the S A.

We call that the thesis sentence.

Okay, so you can see that different than a single

paragraph. Your thesis sentence must come at the last sentence

at the end of the first paragraph.

So this yellow here is not in the first sentence

like it was for writing one.

The yellow is now down here in the end.

Okay, So you're gonna have your your thesis sentence at

the end of paragraph one, and then you can see

after paragraph two after you go through and give your

support in paragraph two, then you can see in paragraph

three, you're going to begin once again with a restatement

of your thesis.

Okay, so that's gonna happen in the first sentence of

the last paragraph.

Okay? And that's very important to see how that how

this is structured it.

These yellow parts need to be these yellow parts of

the most important parts of your essay, the thesis sentence

in the thesis restatement.

And they must be in these proper places.

So here's the flow of the three paragraph essay.

This is an academic.

This is the perfect form for this and again, I'm

I'm very, you know, careful and very particular that I

want you to put everything exactly where it needs to

be and in one sentence each.

Okay, so, uh, in this first part here the blue

part, you begin an essay by by introducing your topic.

It za kind of introduction.

It's called Ah hook.

Because, like a fishhook, you have to put some bait

on there and it catches the fish and gets their

gets them right.

In this case, you're trying to catch the reader.

You want to catch the reader, So you put some

interesting information in your, you know, detailed example in the

beginning, and then the reader starts reading that, but inside

of it, you're starting to introduce what you want to

say to them what you want them to believe.

So it's like a hook.

So this is called an introduction hook.

So the blue part is called an introduction hook and

you can see you have Ah, maybe 1 to 3

sentences there.

Then the pink section here is just a transition, you

know, just some transitions from that detailed example that you

gave it the beginning.

You're going to point down what we often say that

this first paragraph is a downward facing triangle because you

begin with a lot of details about, you know, something

to introduce the topic.

But you don't wanna you don't say what your opinion

or what of the You know, you don't give your

main idea of your essay at the very beginning at

all. You don't want to do that.

You, at the very beginning, you kind of talk about

details that are, you know, related directly and pointing downwards.

Mawr and mawr as you go from the first detailed

long sentence or two in the hook.

Then you start to kind of make your sentences more

general in nature until you get to that last sentence,

the point of the downward triangle.

That last sentence is going to be your thesis sentence,

which really tells.

Here's what my, my My main idea is in this

whole essay, which is my opinion of the article or

the topic.

And then it also includes one supporting reason that's given

there. Okay, so that's what you're going to do in

this yellow part.

The last sentence and it must be one sentence.

Okay, then, when you go to paragraph two, you can

see that we begin with a topic sentence, and I

color this topic sentence green to show you that it's

a topic sentence.

And if you notice there's it's also green in the

sea. I part of the thesis, and that's because again,

your thesis controlling idea.

Like you say, Here's what I think of Gerber's article.

Garber's article.

Here's what I think and here's what I'm going to

say about that.

So if you say you're controlling idea in your thesis,

then in paragraph to the next paragraph, you bring that

idea down and that is paragraph two.

That is the main idea of paragraph two.

So in your topic sentence, that's gonna be your main

idea. And then you need to have a just always

like we dio a main idea of controlling idea.

You need a main idea and at least one or

23 controlling ideas.

I think one or two is best in the in

the topic sentence.

And then that is what you're talking about in the

in the middle of your second paragraph.

Okay, so you can see the blue part.

Here is a lot of details about that.

And then in the final paragraph, you're going to begin

with a restatement of your thesis.

So you're going to say, in conclusion or in, um,

in short or once again, right, you don't want to

say, Therefore don't say therefore in your restatement because therefore

means I'm going to say something kind of new.

You're not saying anything new in that first sentence of

the third paragraph that that is called your conclusion sentence

because you're concluding you're finished.

Your your restating your thesis, your main idea.

So that's what you want to do in the yellow

first sentence again.

Give this one is quite long.

You don't want it to go.

You don't want your real one to go.

Quite. You know this long you're really sentences all of

your sentences for your thesis.

And really, for all of your sentences, but especially the

important ones That thesis and the restatement and the and

and the the topic sentence in paragraph to all three

of those sentences should be fairly short.

You know, one or two lines at most.

Okay, one or two lines it most try to stick

to that, please.

One or two lines for the yellow for the yellow

and green parts here.

Okay. And then you can see that you're going to

kind of have it's, um, transition pink area.

And then you're gonna finish with the closing hook to,

and this is unusual.

A lot of students have trouble with a closing hook,

but a closing hook is Justus important as an introduction

Hook The introduction hook kind of introduces your topic with

something interesting and detailed.

And then it moves down and you talk about you

open up your topic and tell it and explain it.

And then you're concluding topic sentence restates it kind of

closes it back up, closes up.

So after you finish that, that first sentence of the

third paragraph, you're done with your essay.

So then what you want to do is start pulling

away from your topic and kind of talking to the

reader more directly saying why you talked about this.

Why is this important to the reader?

Why did you, you know, tell the reader about this.

This This are your opinion of this article or of

this topic?

Why did you do it?

But how does it relate to their life?

That's what you want to do in the closing hook.

So you want to do it with a detailed example

like you did in the beginning?

Okay, so this structure is really important to follow this.

This Let me get past this real quick.

But this this structure look at the color codes here

and what they represent.

Okay, cause I'm gonna be highlighting that again.

I'll be highlighting your thesis sentences, restatement and your topic

sentence in paragraph two and yellow and green in the

middle. Okay, so you know what they are here is

an example of a three paragraph structure what the marking

would look like.

You can see that this form has a problem.

You need to have proper spacing.

You need to follow my example What it looks like

with proper spacing.

Okay, this time, if you don't, if you have problems

with your form, like serious forms like you don't have

good spacing like this doesn't have good spacing.

And if you have problems with your indent over here

on the side, you should have five spaces.

Like where it begins within.

This is only two spaces here, I think maybe three,

but you need to have five.

Hit the space bar.

512345 You need to do that for the start of

every paragraph.

Okay? If you if you don't do your form right,

you may lose some points for your form.

This time I didn't take off points and writing one

for bad form.

But I will this time because I'm going to give

you a template once again that you could just type

over and you can already see what it looks like.

Okay, but here's how I'm going to market.

You can see how and here you can see the

different color coded the sections here.

So you could see there's no red here because this

person on Lee didn't give didn't give a controlling idea.

Only has one.

Okay, but anyway, take a look at this example like

you did with the other, and and see, you know,

again, look through this carefully and ask any questions that

you have to me.

If you have any questions about the form, let me

know. But we're going to do to to to drafts

of this just like we did.

So I'll be giving you feedback.

And just like writing one, the score that you get

for the rough draft is on Lee, just how much

you've earned so far.

So then you can, you know, do better doom or

and hopefully build your score up and you can get

even a perfect score for writing number to a perfect

10 points with no troubles.

If you do again, if you do a good job

listening to my feedback okay.

About the digital form again, please Onley dot d o

c dot d o c X files.

Because that was the only ones that I can mark.

Okay, Those are the only ones that I can I

can t I can open up and deal with.

Ah couple students sent me hunger word files on I

asked for them to send it back and I didn't

take off points for that.

But I will this time.

If the form is not right I will take off

points again.

You've had examples now you should be able to do

it right And again Pay attention to the red and

green squiggly lines like I gave you.

I put them here again.

You can see all of these air here.

You know how you can correct simple spelling errors or

F20CEC14- Part 3

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