Thursday 4th March - English

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  1. Hi, you two.
  2. I'm back.
  3. It's Thursday and we're going to focusing on our last
  4. writing session for a remote learning.
  5. It's been such a long time since you've been at
  6. school, but you've engaged in so much writing.
  7. We're all so proud of the things that you've written.
  8. And we can't wait to read this final part of
  9. your adventure story.
  10. So let's just recap what we did yesterday.
  11. So you came up with this plan earlier in, um
  12. was last week.
  13. Now, um, yesterday we wrote down our opening and our
  14. build up, and we described really clearly the settings that
  15. we came up with were still some fabulous drama projects
  16. a couple of days ago.
  17. But today we're going to focus on the final three
  18. parts of our story Mountain.
  19. So we're gonna be focusing on the problem, which is
  20. at the top of the mountain.
  21. And as we come down, we're going to be focusing
  22. on our resolution where grand comes to save the day,
  23. and we're then going to look at our ending where
  24. that magic key starts to glow and the Children return
  25. home safely after that huge issue.
  26. So again, um, it's sort of amazing stories.
  27. Yesterday starts of some fabulous stories that you've written.
  28. Make sure that you've got all of these different features
  29. that you've got.
  30. Adjectives, capital letters, full stops, injunctions.
  31. You could use words like and but because so if
  32. lots of different words to stretch out their sentences really
  33. add some more detail into them.
  34. We've seen some Children use speech marks, and you can
  35. continue doing that today a great, great opportunity for, uh
  36. to use speech today when those characters are experiencing that
  37. big problem.
  38. Perfect opportunity there, um when you when we use speech
  39. and stories, quite often, writers would say things afterwards like
  40. said before, said Chick.
  41. But we know that said is really boring.
  42. We don't really like using words like that, and we
  43. can use far better.
  44. You could say things like yelled Chip instead of said
  45. You could say screamed, bellowed, Um, so lots and lots
  46. of different opportunities there.
  47. If you type in, if you get stuck and you
  48. look looking for other ideas, you can type into Google.
  49. Alternative words were said, or fund online thesaurus, and there'll
  50. be plenty of things for you to use their You
  51. could also use adverbs, which words that end in l
  52. Y. You could say that the polar bear moved quickly
  53. through the snow.
  54. Um, the Children crept quietly through the cave.
  55. There's plenty of adverbs you could use as well.
  56. So going back to my story, this is my example.
  57. Um, at this point of the story, I've got a
  58. polar bear coming out of a big, eerie cave, and
  59. the Children haven't noticed him creep out of there.
  60. Um, and obviously, he's a big predator.
  61. He's gonna pose a big risk to the Children.
  62. Um, so I've got some sentence starts right here.
  63. Okay, Let me see him.
  64. Until you can read them with me.
  65. The Children are having the most amazing time until and
  66. again. That would be the part where it starts to
  67. describe the polar bear.
  68. And I'll explain how he's come out of his cave.
  69. And again if you've gone with something different.
  70. I've seen some lovely ideas about aliens.
  71. I've seen some lovely, lovely ideas.
  72. I read a wonderful story yesterday based on footballers.
  73. Um, so again, you can use that sentence starts with
  74. a good one.
  75. It was cheering so loudly, he barely noticed that, and
  76. again as a good example, there a good sentence started
  77. that you could borrow or magpie.
  78. You're more than welcome to use these creeping out from
  79. the depths of the eerie dark cave again.
  80. So I'm using my adjectives.
  81. I'm describing that setting.
  82. I've got some other ones here that you could use
  83. as well.
  84. Um, these are all rhetorical questions.
  85. And again, I didn't mention that on my list of
  86. things that you could use.
  87. But again, if you fancied borrowing some of these, how
  88. could the frightened Children escape safely again?
  89. That's a rhetorical question.
  90. I've also got the L Y word in their adverts.
  91. Was this the end of the Children's magical adventures?
  92. Who was going to save them now?
  93. And if you want to use some speech as a
  94. sentence starter, thinking about how our characters are going to
  95. get out of that sticky problem, there's no hope screened,
  96. Chip, Think, think, think.
  97. And then that's the point where we start to write
  98. about our resolution where Grant is gonna save the day,
  99. so there's lots of ideas there.
  100. I'm more than happy for you to make a pie
  101. those, and to follow my ideas just to get you
  102. started on your writing today, there's plenty for you to
  103. get on with again.
  104. Don't forget.
  105. If you need any help, then you can get in
  106. touch with us on year to help at medical primary
  107. dot com.
  108. But this is the last day of your writing at
  109. home. Tomorrow we'll be doing our guided reading, and then
  110. Monday we'll be back and I can't wait to start
  111. reading some of the learning that you're doing in school.
  112. It's not much longer to go only a few days
  113. left. Keep pushing really hard to that end Goal.
  114. Make sure you're enjoying your writing to you can get
  115. silly or as weird or wonderful as you like, and
  116. it always makes us laugh in school.
  117. Whenever we read something really, really funny, it does make
  118. a struggle.
  119. So choose us up, too, so make sure that you
  120. get weird and wonderful.
  121. We really love it.
  122. So good luck with your writing today.
  123. If you need any help, do you let us know
  124. and you to help at mirabel primary dot com, and
  125. we will see very, very soon.
  126. Bye