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Essay 1 - Thesis and Topic Sentences

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Amanda Haruch

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Along with strong logos appeals, Grose effectively makes appeals to pathos in
the beginning and middle sections. Her introduction is full of emotionally-charged words and phrases that create a sympathetic image; Grose notes that she “was eight months pregnant” and her husband found it difficult to “fight with a massively pregnant person.” The image she evokes of the challenges and vulnerabilities of being so pregnant, as well as the high emotions a woman feels at that time effectively introduce the argument and its seriousness. Her goal is to make the reader feel sympathy for her. Adding to this idea are words and phrases such as, “insisted,” “argued,” “not fun,” “sucks” “headachey,” “be judged,” “be shunned” (Grose). All of these words evoke negative emotions about cleaning, which makes the reader sympathize with women who feel “judged” and shunned”—very negative feelings. Another feeling Grose reinforces with her word choice is the concept of fairness: “fair share,” “a week and a half more of ‘second shift’ work,” “more housework,” “more gendered and less frequent.” These words help establish the unfairness that exists when women do all of the cleaning, and they are an appeal to pathos, or the readers’ feelings of frustration and anger with injustice.

What is a thesis?
Examples of thesis
Your thesis typically appears
in your INTRODUCTION paragraph.
Every one of your topic sentences
should relate directly to your thesis.
It is (usually) one sentence that sums up the argument you will try to make throughout your whole paper.
(sentences from your papers)
1. Take out your draft of your essay.
Topic Sentences
2. Read your first paragraph. Does it have a thesis in it?
If it does, highlight it.
3. Read the rest of your essay.
5. Rewrite a thesis for your essay. Make sure it
a) author's name
b) article name
c) main point
d) audience
e) rhetorical strategy
f) intended effect
4. Look at the conclusion of your essay.
Is there a sentence that might work better as your thesis?
If it does, highlight it.
This activity is meant to help you develop a STRONG thesis for your paper.

Once you have a strong thesis, you will have an easier time figuring out the content of your paper.

If you know WHAT you are arguing for, you will know HOW to support your argument.
Definition: A statement or theory that is put forward as a premise to be maintained or proved.

Serves as a map for your paper. (Usually by addressing WHY.)
What are you
trying to explore?
So what goes in an introduction paragraph?
Introduce the context
Summarize the article
In today’s society, we are quickly moving away from gas powered vehicles to the more environmentally friendly electric vehicles. Tesla, a company created in 2003, is one of the pioneer companies for the engineering of electric vehicles. In order to advertise their new vehicle, the Model S, Tesla created a commercial called “Gallons of Light” to encourage people to buy their cars. In the commercial “Gallons of Light,” Tesla argues to environmentally friendly families that should buy their environmentally friendly car, the Model S. The commercial, "Gallons of Light”, shows the story of the perfect family road tripping across the United States. Tesla emphasizes that the car works on the “power of the sun” and shows that the family only needed to stop minimal times on their road trip to recharge the vehicle. Throughout the commercial, we are continually shown beautiful images of nature landscapes in the US that are brightly lit by sunlight, and we see the family enjoying those scenes. In the advertisement “Gallons of Light,” Telsa effectively convinces environmentally friendly upperclass families to purchased the Model S by using imagery of nature the United States and a story of a perfect family to make their audience appreciate the beauty of nature make them feel that by buying this car they're saving the environment and improving their family.
ccording to the assignment sheet:
the readers' interest
(Issue at hand)
(exigency in today's society)
purpose statement
argues an opinion
initial mapping and forecasting
Introduce the article, author, publisher
Summarizes article
For this assignment:
Decide what main claim or you've decided upon. This means that you've identified (a) main rhetorical strateg(ies) and it's intended effect.
The author in this article argues to his audience that he believes guns should not be regulated.
It should be specific.
Not a generalization.
I should not be able to plop it into any ol' paper.
It should show your readers something that is NOT obvious.
Does it identify a specific audience?
Is it specific?
Does it identify the author's main claim?
In his article, "Why Guns Should Be Legal," Smith attempts to persuade democrat liberals that guns should not be regulated. In order to persuade his audience, he presents statistics from the past ten years to make his audience have a feeling of less safety caused by guns.
Your name Date

_____ Hook/Context

_____ Introduces the author & article

_____ Article main point

_____ Article summary (2-3 sentences)

_____ Thesis
1. Take out a blank sheet of paper.
2. Make your sheet of paper look like this:
3. Read your introduction paragraph.
4. Give yourself a check for each one you have.
5. Write the sentence(s) down underneath each category.
6. If you are missing one, create a sentence for that spot.
7. Re-write your introductory paragraph in a way that gives you a stronger, less wordy thesis with all of the essential components.
What is the topic sentence?
The topic sentence is the first sentence in a paragraph.

What does it do?
It introduces the main idea of the paragraph, which in this essay means it focuses on a rhetorical strategy.

How do I write one?
Summarize the main idea of your paragraph. Indicate to the reader what your paragraph will be about.

First, Canada has an excellent health care system. All Canadians have access to medical services at a reasonable price. Second, Canada has a high standard of education. Students are taught by well-trained teachers and are encouraged to continue studying at university. Finally, Canada's cities are clean and efficiently managed. Canadian cities have many parks and lots of space for people to live. As a result, Canada is a desirable place to live.
There are three reasons why Canada is one of the best countries in the world.
which of these sentences is the topic sentence?
a) So set aside the remote, step outside with your pet, and have some fun al fresco style – we've got plenty of ideas to get you started!

b) A breath of fresh air can do wonders for both you and your pet.

c) Outdoor activities not only provide exercise and mental stimulation, but also help curb bad behaviors by giving your furry friend a chance to release excess energy.
a) Make sure to have plenty of water on hand along with bags to clean up after any messes, and keep a close eye on the group to make sure everyone plays nice.

b) Find a dog park in your area to meet and greet with other pups, or if you have your own fenced-in yard, invite friends or family members over with their pets for an afternoon of backyard fun.

c) Play dates are a great way for dogs to keep their socialization skills sharp.

d) Social networking sites such as Facebook and Ning can also be a great resource for finding a doggie meet-up in your area, even ones based on specific breeds.
which of these sentences is the topic sentence?
Every sentence in the paragraph following your topic sentence should relate to the topic sentence.
Content of each paragraph
Go through your essay, and give each paragraph a number.

Highlight each of your topic sentences.

Underline where in that sentence you have identified a rhetorical move.

Rewrite the sentence to make sure it is a) concise, b) highlights a rhetorical move, c) explain the intended effect of that move, and d) is an accurate summary for the paragraph as a whole.

If you feel you don't need to rewrite a sentence, provide a justification for why that topic sentence is already strong.
Because each topic sentence should relate to your thesis, all of the content in each paragraph should also relate to your thesis.
Therefore, everything in your essay should be relevant to the argument you are making.
1. Pick one paragraph from your essay (not your introduction).

2. Read the topic sentence.

3. Does the topic sentence make a claim about a rhetorical move? Does it relate to your thesis?
3a) If not, rewrite your topic sentence.

4. Highlight/underline all EXAMPLES throughout your paragraph that show where the author does that rhetorical move. Add in any examples that you haven't talked about yet but are relevant.

5. Put *asterisks* around each sentence that focuses on analysis. Did you explain *why* the author did that, *how* it was persuasive, and *how* the audience responded/felt/thought as a result? Make expand on those.
and how it relates to the rest of your paper.
Last but not least, don't forget to proofread!
Is everything in this paragraph relevant to the topic sentence?

Is there any sentences we can remove?
Does it make a claim about the rhetorical strategy?
Does it identify the intended effect of that strategy?
At the end of each paragraph, you should provide the link back to your thesis (reiterate how that paragraph links back to your thesis).
In the advertisement “Gallons of Light,” Telsa effectively convinces environmentally friendly upperclass families to purchased the Model S by showing a perfect family and emphasizing their relationship with nature to make their audience appreciate the beauty of nature and want to invest in a car that will give them a happy family who appreciates nature.
Is it specific?
Does it identify the author's main claim?
Does it make a claim about the rhetorical strategy?
Does it identify the intended effect of that strategy?
Does it identify a specific audience?
e) emotionally driven language and experiences that relate to her readers f) make her audience feel good about their decision to not settle down.

e) appeals to the audiences sense of wonder, f) which makes her audience feel reassured about their decision not to settle down.

e) uses her own personal experience f) to reassure her audience that it’s OK to be an underachiever.

e) showing a perfect family and emphasizing their relationship with nature f) to make their audience appreciate the beauty of nature make them feel that by buying this car they're saving the environment.

e) using emotional connections and relateable circumstances that allow readers f) to understand her lifestyle and thus, make the change in the decision of their lifestyle and further plans.
A woman’s work is never done: many American women grow up with this
saying and feel it to be true. One such woman, author Jessica Grose, wrote “Cleaning: The Final Feminist Frontier,” published in 2013 in the New Republic, and she argues that while the men in our lives recently started taking on more of the childcare and cooking, cleaning still falls unfairly on women. In her article, Grose first sets the stage by describing a specific scenario of housecleaning with her husband after being shut in during Hurricane Sandy, and then sheoutlines the uneven distribution of cleaning work in her marriage and draws a comparison to the larger feminist issue of who does the cleaning in a relationship. Grose continuesby discussing some of the reasons that men do not contribute to cleaning: the praise for a
clean house goes to the woman; advertising and media praise men’s cooking and childcare, but not cleaning; and lastly, it is just not fun. Throughout her article, Grose persuades her audience that men should, too, participate in cleaning. In order to persuade her audience, she builds her credibility with personal facts and reputable sources, citing convincing facts and statistics, and successfully employing emotional appeals to make her audience empathize with plight.
In addition to the fact that we are the first generation to believe otherwise when it comes to living life to the fullest, Braun uses diction to create a style of writing that is appealing to the audience.

Throughout the video the dramatic revolutionary style music was being played to appeal to the audiences sense of patriotism.

In his second argument, the author used pathos and ethos which appeals to the audience logically and emotionally by giving credit to pharmacists and nurses.

The Old Spice commercial tries to seem as it has an impact on your economic wealth through hyperbole. I
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