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Statement of Intention
Transcript of Statement of Intention
What you must include
Audience: Who is your piece aimed at? Why? What language choices have you made to appeal to them? What themes are you drawing on that they can relate to?
Statement of Intention
Creating and Presenting requires you to create a new and unique piece of writing that has been inspired by the studied text.
You can choose to write in a creative, persuasive or expository style, and may incorporate the text as little or as much as you wish. However, it is important that you are able to articulate your choices about the various aspects of writing and are able to explain your choices through written expression.
Form; What style and structure is your writing going to take? (creative: narrative, poetry, lyrics, journal entries, etc)
Purpose; What is the message your writing is trying to achieve? How do you want your readers to think or feel after reading it?
Language; What sort of language are you going to use to convey your message? (eg. persuasive techniques, dialogue, description, rhythm and rhyme, etc)
Audience; Who are you aiming your writing at? (consider age, gender, prior knowledge)
Context; Explain how your piece links to the text in a meaningful way
Statement of Intention
The statement has encouraged me to convey my thoughts on how society influences the values that individuals adopt and practise. I will express this through an expository piece, more specifically a feature article that demonstrates how society has often victimised people. I intend to discuss the consequences of conforming to conventional expectations and the sacrifices required in order to obtain acceptance. My proposed audience are readers of The Herald Sun Newspaper as it covers currents events and issues that need addressing. It is a newspaper that can hold the reader’s attention as it is comprised of pieces that are relevant to the ‘everyday Australian’. My piece in particular is intended for people who wish to see individuality become more widely accepted and those who may have been affected by the issues that society has previously or currently condemned. Such a piece requires the use of formal and informative language in order to engage the reader while providing facts that the audience are able to understand. I will use my knowledge of previous and recent events in order to develop a paper that explores a variety of topics associated with belonging and identity and how they can often stimulate a feeling of entrapment and isolation. My prompt is Belonging Can Trap and Isolate Us.
There are significant parallels with these issues and the prejudice of characters in the film ‘Skin’. The foundations of an individual’s values are an extension of both their family’s values and those of society. Sandra was raised to believe that she was member of white society. It was not until she attended a ‘white only’ school that the general public demonstrated its dismissal of people with ‘coloured’ skin to the audience. People are often required to compromise personal values to ensure their acceptance among certain groups that endorse specific beliefs. Sandra was mistreated by her peers as the conventional belief was that coloured people are inferior beings in South Africa during the Apartheid. The consequences of conforming often result in a loss of identity as we can abandon our individuality in order to belong. People therefore adopt a persona that allows them to conform to the conventional expectations of the desired group, compromising their personal beliefs in order to avoid alienation. This is the reason many people don’t oppose issues such as racism. During the Apartheid black people were not allowed to marry white people; just as in modern society people are not able to marry members of the same sex in many countries. Societal values can affect someone’s identity and belonging as human nature has a desire for acceptance. Sandra is unable to belong to either society as her skin colour inhibits her ability to belong within the white community yet her classification places limitations on her ability to belong within the black population. It is imperative that society is able to move forward from past restrictions in order to ensure the future growth of a social group. Nelson Mandela reprimanded the Apartheid Laws which allowed members of all racial groups the opportunity to be treated as equals just as Kevin Rudd’s apology in 2008 officially recognised the Indigenous population as equal to those of non-Aboriginal descent. These are the main parallels between my piece and the context of the film ‘Skin’.
The Way out
Form: Explain the form you have chosen to write in, from the general to the specific (eg. Persuasive piece, in the form of an opinion piece to be published in the Age.
Language: Identify stylistic features or devices you have maintained or utilised from the original text INTO YOUR response like imagery, symbolism, tone, mood, themes, background, setting, atmosphere OR the conventions of the author. Remember to provide examples of the original text and then examples of your own work which demonstrates an emulation of the text.
Purpose: WHY do you think your piece gives fresh insight into the thematic purpose of the text? – and what do you hope a reader will gain from reading your response?
WHY do you think this theme was important and thought provoking? What will your audience learn after having read your piece?
Context: Explain the way your piece links to the text and 'Identity & Belonging'. Explain the new perspective you are creating in relation to 'Wild Cat Falling'. What insight is given into the context through your piece.
You must also explain how you have used the prompt as a vehicle for your piece. How does your piece examine and use the prompt for the development for your writing?
The following short story tells an allegorical tale of a place where parents genetically sculpt their children to create a male-dominated society due to the supposed inferiority of women. One girl decides to stand up to the harsh treatment she endures from her father.
With this piece, I attempt to show that an individual’s identity is indeed shaped by their relationships. The way #5 is reprimanded by her parents and how it gives her a sense of worthlessness is the key message being portrayed.
The types of persuasive language I chose to incorporate into the story are few, but they are effective in communicating the message of the story. I used the technique of repetition in order to show the way her life is the same every day, and how it furthers #5’s personality by showing how little she cares due to years of neglect and belittlement. By using appeals to emotions such as outrage and strength, I intend to connect to the reader on a sympathetic level, which will weaken their defences enough and help them form a relationship with the characters and feel real pity for #5. By using dialogue, a better connection with the characters can be formed and provides important but subtle hints about their personalities and values.
The intended audience would be someone who doesn’t have extreme parental issues (in either an overly positive or negative way) as this will hinder the relationship between #5 and the reader. The audience would need a tolerance for violence and cruelty and would need to know a bit about genetics.
The piece is similar to the film ‘Skin’, in that #5’s parents (especially her father) reprimand her, and treat her as an outsider. This gives her a sense of worthlessness and forces her to stand up for herself, as Sandra Laing does in “Skin”. Similarly, #5’s male siblings find more acceptance and love due to their genetic makeup, just as Sandra’s brothers were (#2 and #4 are also involved in this link due to the way they are neglected.) The father is similar to Sandra’s father, Abraham, in the way his distaste for his child is due to the child’s genetics rather than their personality or ethics. #5 shows that individuality is defined by relationships by the way her mistreatment by her parents causes her to turn on them and become more introverted.
STATEMENT OF INTENTION
I chose to produce a piece of creative prose in the form of a short story entitled “Platoon” from the perspective of a young man who was a former Australian Army soldier, now living with post-traumatic stress after enduring three years of imprisonment in Afghanistan. Due to his illness, the soldier’s relationship with his wife has strained, simultaneously his home life has a consistent tense atmosphere. I took inspiration from Colin Johnson’s (Mudrooroo’s) Wild Cat Falling (1965) through imitating his structural techniques also exploring one of Johnson’s common concepts, the use of psychological defence mechanisms to cope in modern Australian society.
I have emulated several techniques used by Johnson including the use of unnamed protagonists and first person perspective, furthermore the structure assumed by Johnson through the three parts of Wild Cat Falling, “Release... Freedom…Return”. Similar to “the boy” in Johnson’s novel, I have chosen to leave my protagonist nameless in order for the character’s
Due to his illness, the soldier uses the psychological defence mechanism of displacement to satisfy his impulsive aggression towards the events of the war
I used the prompt ‘we can lose our identity and belonging when our environment changes’ to produce a piece of creative prose in the form of a short story focusing on the affect war has on an individual’s mental state. The purpose behind my piece is to educate my audience that the environments we immerse ourselves in have an immense influence on our behaviour and hence the consequences we encounter. This would impact an audience and provoke them to consider the choices they make in regards to the environments they choose to engage in, as their sense of belonging and identity will most likely be influenced. Through the use of alternating tenses, I craft a short story that concentrates on an ex-soldier in the Australian Army who is incapable of reintegrating into modern society after being isolated from social norms and human affection for three years. The soldier’s anger and anxiety, inspired from the events of the war, are displaced onto his wife as he relives the happenings of Afghanistan every day. The soldier is constantly stuck in an altered state of consciousness where he struggles to depict memories from reality. Through my piece, I expose my audience to the possible perils of being exposed to a new environment. I explore the notion that individuals are immensely vulnerable to the influence of modification. Though one may strongly believe they are invincible to the subject of amendment concerning their identity, especially when one is so imminent on knowing who they are, they are oblivious to the fact that experience alters them whether they chose it to or not. People, at a young age, are changing environments and social groups often and may realise that with every new setting may come new characteristics that build upon, or completely change, their identity. Experiences have a huge effect on individuals and give them the chance to learn through development and adaption. This is reflected within my character, the soldier, whom whilst captured in Afghanistan, had to learn to adapt to the unfamiliar state of immense violence, long periods of isolation, starvation and sleep deprivation. A juxtaposing situation to the loving and happy atmosphere he experienced at home from his wife before he was deployed. Alternating tense is used throughout my short story to allow the audience to sufficiently depict when the soldier is alternating in and out of reality. The memories of the war are told in present tense to highlight that the soldier is permanently in the mindset of the war. The soldier had spent so much time overseas in the conditions of Afghanistan that, when he returned back to normal civilian life, he strived to endure in an environment that was now so foreign. The prose is told in first person to allow readers to experience firsthand the side effects of the war and his constant struggle over the memories he constantly relives. His illness (Post Traumatic Stress Disorder) even propels the soldier to act violently against the person who is his world, his wife, and forces him to regret meeting his soul mate so that she could’ve lived a normal and happy life. As an audience member, my piece is designed to provoke fear and disbelief at the consequences the soldier and his wife have to endure. This viewpoint into the individual’s head makes it simple for them to understand why the soldier so avidly takes up the opportunity to be deployed again because it’s the only thing the soldier knows now. It’s the only thing he is good at. He needed to go back to the environment where he knew he belonged. His newfound identity disallowed him to survive within every day civilization. My piece is aimed at an older and more mature audience that already have some knowledge and understanding of the potential influence certain relationships and associations can have in conjunction with the environment we find ourselves immersed in. The idealistic audience would be students in year 10 through to year 12 English classes as they are able to understand the language, would have prior familiarity into the themes incorporated and also would have an adult educator present to further educate the students on the psychological defence mechanisms and mental illness evident within my piece. This creative piece relates to our year 12 text of Wild Cat Falling in relation to the psychological defence mechanisms the boy uses in order to cope with the miserable life he has wound up living. Wild Cat Falling depicts the boy as an internally-angry character who displaces his aggression onto other characters, such as Denise, through the form of sex. His hostility for being forever unfulfilled provokes him to return to jail as that is the only place he feels he truly belongs. A parallel is drawn between the displacement of anger and even anxiety of the boy within the text and the soldier within my short story Platoon. This prompt has allowed me to explore how humans endure after unexpected dreadful situations are forced upon them. Simultaneously, I construct a storyline that forces my audience to question the environment they immerse themselves in and to review whether their sense of identity is being influenced in a rewarding or rather discouraging practice.