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Using sensory details in writing

guided practice of descritpive writing

Martha Hanson

on 16 October 2012

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Transcript of Using sensory details in writing

Using Sensory Details in Writing When you describe a person, place
or thing,
it is important to give the reader
a clear picture of what you are
The BEST way to do this is to use
sensory details using the 5 Senses.... Describe the following using as many sensory
details as you can... dog


lion Example of text
Underline sensory details I remember going to the beach with my friends. I found a cool, breezy place
on the white, gritty sand. I closed my eyes and heard the children's laughter and the slapping of the waves against the sand. Example of text WITHOUT sensory details

Grandmother Smith reached over and grabbed her grandson's arm. He was nervous because the staircase was so steep, but she leaned against him and they began to climb. Grandmother Smith lurched over and grabbed the pale skin of Randal's thin forearm with her leathery hand. The folds of her skin coiled themselves out like electrical wiring. Randal gazed ahead toward the winding, spiral staircase, fidgeted with a small hole in his shirt and bit his lip. His mouth filled with the sweet, coppery taste of blood. She leaned in closely to him, breathing on the damp hair at the base of his neck. She smelled of wet cigarettes and fried food. As they slowly climbed the steep staircase,the only sounds were his grandmother's labored breathing and the creak of the stairs. Fear of seeing a police car pull into the drive.
Fear of falling asleep at night.
Fear of not falling asleep.
Fear of the past rising up.
Fear of the present taking flight.
Fear of the telephone that rings in the dead of night.
Fear of electrical storms.
Fear of the cleaning woman who has a spot on her cheek.
Fear of dogs I'm told won't bite.
Fear of anxiety.
Fear of having to identify the body of a dead friend.
Fear of running out of money.
Fear of having too much, thought people won't believe this.
Fear of psychological profiles.
Fear of being late and fear of arriving before anyone else.
Fear of my children's handwriting on envelopes.
Fear they'll die before I do and I'll feel guilty.
Fear of having to live with my mother in her old age and mine.
Fear of confusion.
Fear this day will end on an unhappy note.
Fear of waking up and finding you gone. FEAR by Raymond Carver Fear of not loving and fear of not loving enough.
Fear that what I love will prove lethal to those I love.
Fear of death.
Fear of living too long.
Fear of death.

I've said that. Fear by Joe Student Fear of sirens blaring the sound of one of my family
being hurt.
Fear of dark, creepy places covered with dust.
Fear of clowns, their faces dripping with make-up
and paint.
Fear of furry rats, scurrying down the hallway.
Fear of slime oozing down the walls of my room.
Fear of black, inky crickets chirping and hopping.
Fear of hissing snakes slithering toward me.
Fear of my rasping, rattling last breath.
Fear of death.

I've said that. YOUR TASK: Your job is to write a poem in the style of Raymond Carver using sensory
details to describe EACH fear.

You need to have at least 8 fears.
Each fear must be described using sensory details.
Each line should begin with fear of....
Your last lines should be...
Fear of death.
I've said that.
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