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10.1.3 Write a narrative essay or memoir about a meaningful

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Transcript of 10.1.3 Write a narrative essay or memoir about a meaningful

Giving...students, teenagers, any form of power over the use of their own words, allowing them to turn everyday raw material into some form of beauty, is a gift beyond measure."

- Gloria Ng, bestselling author

Memoir Rubric #1
Imagery...
The author below could have written, "I was attracted to her," but instead he writes:




"She had on a kind of dirty-pink--beige maybe, I don't know--bathing suit...the straps were down. They were off her shoulders looped loose around the cool tops of her arms...I mean, it was more than pretty."


This we can
SEE.
GOAL!
10.1.3 Write a narrative essay or memoir about a meaningful personal experience.
A memoir is
a narrative composed from
personal experience
- Merriam-Webster
to narrate: to recount events, experiences;
to give an account/tell a story
- Dictionary.com
12 pt. font/Times New Roman/Double-spaced
Paragraphing (changing for every new speaker, idea, etc.)

Imagery (allusions, understatement, metaphor, etc.)

Juxtaposition, paradox and/or irony

Story arc

Not yet 5
Not yet 5

Not yet 7 8 9 10
Not yet 7 8 9 10
Not yet 7 8 9 10
Strengths:

Achilles' Heel (weak spots):
We all have internal movies running through our minds. I want your story--
your
internal movie--to have the power to replace
my
internal movie.
All
good stories start from a character, in this case YOU, who has a problem to be overcome. Without
CONFLICT
,
there is no story...
Consider this your GOAL:


Imagery (continued).

Consider the importance of BODY LANGUAGE in building your story.
The following author could have simply written, "My father loved my sister more than me," but instead she writes:

I wanted to sit opposite my father at dinner and have him smile at me like that.


Not only do we SEE this, but we BELIEVE it
.
Write your truth.
Updike, J. (1961). A&P. J. Moffett (Ed.) & K.R. McElheny (Ed.),
Points of view: an anthology of short stories
(pp. 220 - 226). New York, New York: New American Library. 1966.
C.M. Rich. (1955). My sister's marriage. J. Moffett (Ed.) & K.R. McElheny (Ed.),
Points of view: an anthology of short stories
(pp. 200 - 213). New York, New York: New American Library. 1966.
Some of what we just viewed :
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1. "My mom just had my boyfriend deported."

2. "I never got my Hogwarts letter."

3. "Found a million flaws with perfection." (paradox:)

Write down your own 6 word
memoir(s). - 15 mins
.
From hereon out,
whenever you see this gorgeous brain....
...it means to brainstorm:
Jot down/draw your ideas, in pencil on your half sheet of white poster paper. By the end of this presentation, your teacher will look to see that you've filled up your page (10 pts. completion).
Don't worry about being "good"...yet.
What's the movie running through your head all the time?
Slow it down.
Maybe start your piece with one of these and
just. keep. writing.
- 5 mins.






Him. Her. Them. My mom. My dad.
The team.
The grade.
It hurts.
I'm scared.
This isn't normal.
Why
not
me? Why me?
I am
so
embarrassed!







Best pet ever:(
Worst
words...
Different
here....
I lost.
Betrayed.
NO ONE SEES ME THE WAY I AM.
The fight.

Be brave with the page.
Write what you don't want anyone to see
that you see, or feel, in the scenes from your life--the thoughts in your head...
Jot down/draw
internal and external
conflict(s)
in your life
(
past
or
current
).
...then cross it off/rip it into little recyclable pieces.
3 mins.
We spoke of IMAGERY
Great writers also see life's juxtapositions, paradoxes and ironies.
so...what are these?
Juxtaposition:
an act or instance of placing close together
or side by side, especially for comparison or contrast.
Dove evolution
What's being juxtaposed? Why?
By the way, the title of the last
piece was Dove
evolution.
What's IRONIC about the title?
PARADOX


Raise your hand
if you have ever been in, observed, or heard of one of the above.

love/hate relationship?
PARADOX:
any person, thing, or situation exhibiting an
apparently contradictory nature.
- Dictionary.com
Later, you may decide to write
about what you just scratched off/tore up.
Good.
(maybe).

Unless
you
don't
have
problems...
keep
thinking...
Yep: THERE
THEY ARE.
I don't
fit
in.
Food for thought
Her name was Mia (actually, not really, but I'm protecting her identity).
Mia, and the whole
class, were the kind
that make teachers
cry. Not me, no not
me, but the
one before me, so
when they scared the
first away, it was my
turn.
Mia had her back
to me on the first day
of class. She was loud.
She swore. Not all kids
are sweet.

I asked Mia to stay after class. I put my arm up on the door, so she couldn't get by, but she pushed it away and said "F@#!....!!! B!"
A couple of suspensions and seating charts later, things got a bit better. And then the MEMOIR. I told them it might be nice to start with a conflict in their lives. Mia said, "That's easy. My mom."
Everyday.
Mia said, "Oh! So I should
start with how we fight a lot?!"

She turned in her first sentence.

I gave it back.

I said, "Tell the truth."

She said she was.

I said, "All families argue, but they don't
all argue about the same thing. What does
she say?"

Mia wrote, "My mom said, "Hey! Stupid!"

I gave her back her paper. I told her to write
the truth.

She said it was.

I said, "Are you sure? Are you sure your mother
doesn't say, "Mira! Estupida!"? Mia laughed. Not because it was funny, but because it was true, and sometimes truth makes us laugh. She asked how I knew. I said I didn't, but that what I'd experienced is that every native speaking Spanish speaking mother I've spoken to, when angry, yells in Spanish, not English.

Mia wrote a beautiful and horrifying story. She came to me when the bruises came to her. So I need to let you know now what we, as teachers, must do, legally, and where we don't all agree, ethically.
mandatory reporters.
If you report, or if we suspect
abuse/neglect committed by you,
or by you, we
have
to report it to
your counselor.
Beyond this, every teacher has his/her own ideas of what is okay to write about. As for me? I will tell you a brief story (anecdote) about a former student.
MCPS employees are
After the next inspiring
clip,

The gorgeous brain


will appear and you'll be asked
to write your own six-minute
Memoir as an ICE BREAKER.
What makes the aforementioned good? What devices are being employed?
DISCUSS - tbd (5 mins.)
(be ready to share)

Brave writers
:

*Write your six-word Memoir on the board.

DISCUSS WITH
TEACHER'S GUIDANCE:
What are the strengths
and limitations of each piece? Any devices employed? How can we
make each better?
- 15 mins.
so disappointed
Juxtaposition, Irony and/or Paradox
I felt this (emotion) and this (oppositie emotion). - paradox

Is it worse to break up when it's
raining in January or on Valentine's
Day? Think of a scene where
what was happening was made worse by the setting. - juxtaposition

Did something turn out completely opposite of what you intended? - irony
juxtaposition - two directly or indirectly related entities placed together to highlight
the contrast between the two for dramatic
effect.
What is being juxtaposed? How does it add to the scene?
What is the juxtaposition?
How does it add to the
scene?


"It was the best of times, it was the worst of times."


Here are some voices of teens. Maybe they'll give you an idea/topic about which to write.
The rest of the presentation explores each of these expectations...
Tan, A. (1989). The voice from the other side of the wall. J. Moffett (Ed.) & K.R. McElheny (Ed.), Points of view: an anthology of short stories (pp. 220 - 226). New York, New York: New American Library. 1966.
Between each clip, write down the topic--and or the technique--of what you just heard. Can you relate? If so, jot down a sentence or two.
Raise your hand if you have
been in, seen, or heard of a
LOVE/HATE RELATIONSHIP?
If so, then you know what a
PARADOX
is:
A statement or proposition that seems
self-contradictory but in reality expresses a possible truth. - Dictionary.com
Dickens, C. (1900).
A tale of two cities.
London: Hazell,
Watson & Viney (p. 1).


Example: Getting dumped
on
Valentine's Day
(ugh).
Describe a scene in your
life with juxtaposition.
when ugly was pretty.
when innocent was evil.
when a happy occasion was sad.
when a sad occasion was happy.
when intelligent became stupid.
ideas:
5 mins.
Consider the body language in this scene
from
Jaws
. What is being conveyed? If this were
written, how would you write it (use first person
in your description: "My father....")?
Memoir Rubric for Final Draft
note to teacher: Let students HEAR--not see--each clip
Imagery...


Reflect on a time in your life (if you already know what story you'll be telling, pick a SCENE from this story) when you would have known what was going on, even if there
were no words.

Use body language (imagery) in your descriptions.






suggestion to teacher: Have students hire actors
and act out these scenes. See if the audience
can guess what is happening. - time tbd by teacher - REST OF CLASS

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"I can resist anything but temptation." - Oscar Wilde

“All animals are equal, but some are more equal than others." - George Orwell

"I must be cruel to be kind." - William Shakespeare
Think of
adjectives
. Think of yourself,
or someone about whom you often think. Think of how you, or they, possess opposing characteristics. Write this/these down.
or: Think of a period in your life where you experienced opposing emotions and /or experiences. - 5 mins.

Discuss:
What makes
these
paradoxes?
Why are they
"good"?
- 5 mins.
Irony
Language device in which the real intent is concealed or contradicted by the literal meaning of words or a situation
.

Verbal irony,
either spoken or written, arises from an awareness of contrast between what is and what ought to be.
Situational irony,
an incongruity in a work between what is expected and what occurs.

- Merriam-Webster dictionary (on-line).
uhhh.....
Irony
is often best described by examples, not by definition. With this, we will listen
to/read the lyrics to "Isn't it Ironic?" by Alanis Morrisette that has
some
examples of irony:
Irony

I find that when I'm about to tell someone: "You'll
never
believe what happened," it's because Irony is involved. Write down a brief outline of a story that begins
with
you'll never believe what happened...
- 5 mins
Story Arc
You have
now had
some
time to
think
about
what to write.


Copy this story arc organizer and write a note underneath each step to remind yourself what happened. - 15 minutes.
"You have to have movement and change for it to be a
story" - Erika Rao, English teacher (MCPS).

Write
about three times
in your life when
you saw the world
differently.
- 10 mins.
Congratulations!
You have completed
the brainstorming for your story.

Before we start typing
it up, let's discuss...
I'm a happy
brain:)
Mechanics!
Grammar!
Usage!
Spelling! - okay, not spelling (use spell check!)
12 point font/Times New Roman/Double-spaced and INDENT FIVE for every new
idea/speaker.
Teacher: Have students view any story
from Points of View, etc. to examine formatting.
Agreement
Subject/Verb

Pronoun/Antecedent (@12 mins.)
Agreement handout to be completed after presentation.
start at 11:15
(@12 mins.)
Punctuation
: 37

...
(ellipses indicate reflection and/or an incomplete thought.

--
(dashes are used when you are interrupting your own thought or when someone is interrupting another's thoughts or words).

italicize
words to show emphasis (don't use ALL CAPS)

Use
exclamation
points when people are yelling at each other (and
rarely
for any other purpose)
- 5 mins.
Circle the ones
that you think would make for the best stories
.
listing
dialogue
symbolism
defining
observation
Last assignment for today.
If time left, have
students begin
writing their
stories.
Th
e above, famous example of paradox...can you relate?
Review
AGREEMENT
worksheet

Last activity for
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