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Developing the Rough Draft-Narrative

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Tools, Not Rules
Grammar
1. Soon, everyone's writing will be grammatically correct.

2. To distinguish yourself, you must be able to present
yourself/your personality/your intelligence
clearly and more effectively than others.

3. Grammar & Punctuation are one of the most
important tool in written expression
All necessary information is present; we are not left wondering.
- I am walking to the store.
- We need to buy milk and bread.
independent clauses

Independent clauses are complete and can stand alone as sentences.
They are not complete thoughts, and they are leaving something out.
 
After work today
As the day progresses

Not until next week.
dependent clauses

Dependent clauses are the same as incomplete sentences or sentence fragments.


DEPENDENT CLAUSES MUST ALWAYS BE PAIRED WITH INDEPENDENT CLAUSES IN ORDER TO BE COMPLETE



Dependent Clause-- After work today
Independent Clause-- I will go to the store
Possible sentence constructions:
1.
2.
GRAMMAR: TOOLS NOT RULES
LEARN ONE RULE AND
FIX YOUR GRAMMAR FOREVER
Even if you are good with grammar, you can always try to push yourself to use it in more creative and unique ways. It is the key to written expression.

Once you can quickly identify a phrase as being independent or dependent, then you know exactly which type of punctuation are necessary.
Change your perspective on
Grammar & Punctuation

Shift from the mindset of trying not to screw up
to the mindest of
Actively making choices,
writing on purpose,
achieving an effect

Sentence variety is the #1 effect
Different length sentences makes your writing stronger

The Easiest Way to Improve Your Writing =

Sentence Variety-Different length sentences
THE SECRET TO SENTENCE VARIETY
--as you write, learn to distinguish between independent clauses and dependent clauses.

;

The semi-colon rule: there must be an independent clause on
BOTH sides of the semi-colon.

I am walking to the store ; I will buy milk and bread.








The colon rule is that an independent clause/complete sentence must come before the colon.

: (anything may follow a colon).
 
ONE EXCEPTION (if you use the phrase `the following’)
i.e. I needed to buy: dog food, a car, an apple, and a horse. =INCORRECT
I needed to buy the following: dog food, a car, an apple, and a horse= CORRECT
.
Create two separate sentences
Tools to Expand, Improve and Develop
Your Rough Draft

Story Development: Part 3
Story in 6 scenes: Storyboard
I. Divide your essay into 6 scenes.

Leave swimming pool-arrive at side of the road
Wait at side of road
They cross, I don't
Woman yelling at me not to move
I run across
We walk home

1.
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
Story Development: Part 1
Mapping
Story Development: Part 2
Story in 5 parts: Outline
SENTENCE VARIETY
,
#1 Mistake
Comma Splice ,
I went to the store, I bought a dog.
OPTION # 1- Semi-colon
OPTION # 2 Comma/conjunction

, and
OPTION # 3- 2 sentences
How to use the colon
Using the colon on purpose
There was only one thing left to do: run.
Task List
1. Complete & Submit Rough Draft
2. Complete Story Board
3. Download &^Complete Self-Evaluation-->
blackboard-->assignments-->module 3--> Self Evaluatio

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4

5
Draw each of your scenes in a separate box
1. Focus on including all necessary details in each scene
2.Focus on what action or interaction needs to happen in each scene.

3. When you're done compare the storyboard
to your rough draft.

Each scene should be fully developed in your essay

4. Make notes on your rough draft with suggestions for those scenes that are not developed enough
Narrative Essay: Personal Memory Essay
Purpose: to write an essay that narrates a single episode from your childhood, using descriptive language & vivid detail--all 5 senses


Intention: To express the significance of that particular episode, by showing how your perspective changed from the beginning to the end of the story

Assignments
1. Soon, everyone's writing will be grammatically correct.

2. To distinguish yourself, you must be able to present
yourself/your personality/your intelligence
clearly and more effectively than others.

3. Grammar & Punctuation are one of the most
important tool in written expression
GRAMMAR: TOOLS NOT RULES
All necessary information is present; we are not left wondering.
- I am walking to the store.
- We need to buy milk and bread.
independent clauses

Independent clauses are complete and can stand alone as sentences.
They are not complete thoughts, and they are leaving something out.
 
After work today
As the day progresses

Not until next week.
dependent clauses

Dependent clauses are the same as incomplete sentences or sentence fragments.


DEPENDENT CLAUSES MUST ALWAYS BE PAIRED WITH INDEPENDENT CLAUSES IN ORDER TO BE COMPLETE



Dependent Clause-- After work today
Independent Clause-- I will go to the store
Developing the Narrative Rough Draft
The comma/conjunction rule: there must be an
I am walking to the store, and I will buy milk and bread. independent clause on BOTH sides of the comma/conjunction.
NARRATION UNIT
Mapping & freewriting-2 pages
Outline
Salvation exercise
Rough Draft 700-900 words /Title: what the essay is about
Storyboard-6 SCENE DRAWING
'Not Crossing the Road' assignment. QUESTIONS
Improved Rough Draft
Self-Evaluation
Final Draft 1200-1400wds
MLA Format: Double-spaced, 12 pt font name, date, class- upper left


READ THE STORY 'NOT CROSSING THE ROAD' AND
ANSWER THE FOLLOWING QUESTIONS:

NOT CROSSING THE ROAD ASSIGNMENT
1. Identify 3 places in the essay where the writer spends some time developing the inner thought process of the main character.

2. While climactic moments happen very quickly in actual life, you want to try and slow down the climactic moment in an essay. Explain how the writer slows down the climactic moment in the essay.

3. One technique for developing description in an essay is to use negation. Negation is the process of describing what something is not. For example,
“The sound of the water falling from the roof is not the soothing and delicate sound of spring raindrops or droplets.”
Identify 2 examples of negation in the essay. Explain what effect this type of description can have on the reader.
FREEWRITING-2 pages

3 Freewrite:
Purpose: To keep your pen moving without stopping for 5 minutes. To disrupt the logical censor in your head and discover useful ideas.
Intention: To identify an emotionally significant moment from your childhood

1. One of the scariest moments during my childhood was the time when….

2. One of the saddest days of my childhood was the day when…

3. One of the times I remember being lied to or betrayed by someone was the time when….

Choosing the best event for the Personal Memory Essay-
Award points to your freewrite if it meets the following criteria
Write the points down next to the freewrite:

1 point You experienced a strong emotional reaction
2 points You can remember the event enough to use strong descriptive language
3 points The emotion comes from a single moment, a specific episode with a limited time frame
4 points You were a participant in the episode-directly involved
5 points You made a choice or decision that caused the event to take place.
6 points Comfortable with others reading about the episode.
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