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An Inspector Calls 1: Writing successful Paragraphs

AIC Sucessful Paragraphs
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Mr Dean Colston's English

on 1 March 2013

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Transcript of An Inspector Calls 1: Writing successful Paragraphs

Your essay answers the question; it doesn’t read like a learnt essay forced towards the question.
Your essay shows a familiarity with the text and the central ideas explored.
Quotes are picked carefully to support points and allow development of language analysis.
A)You ‘explode’ the quote picking out key words and phrases and commenting on the effect of these; you are aiming to identify layers of meaning. B) Awareness of dramatic devices.
You show an understanding of the way that the writer addresses fundamental human concerns (e.g. morality, love, war). The Inspector questions the morality of the Birlings. For example, he tells Sheila ‘You used the power you had... to punish the girl’. In this instance, the Inspector is forcing Sheila to come to terms with the consequences of her complaint about Eva’s service; we learn that the complaints were simply the result of her feelings of vanity and jealousy. The emotive term ‘punish’ is used to emphasise the effect that Sheila’s complaint had on Eva’s life. It is through the device of the Inspector that Priestley is able to show that his view that such harsh treatment of vulnerable people is immoral.

Marker’s Commentary:

The candidate focuses on the question throughout (1.) using a topic/ concluding sentence to the paragraph. The quote is relevant (3.) and the candidate shows a confident knowledge of the text (2.) and themes (5.) There is some analysis of language (4.A) and good analysis of the Inspector as a dramatic device (4.B) ‘Explore the Presentation of morality in the play’ Looking at example paragraphs: Approximate Grade C+ The Inspector presents morality. For example, he tells Sheila ‘You used the power you had... to punish the girl’. The Inspector is telling Sheila to own up to her treatment of Eva.

Marker’s Commentary:

The candidate answers the question (1.) presents a relevant quote (3.) and shows some very basic understanding of the text (2.) ‘Explore the Presentation of morality in the play’ Your essay answers the question; it doesn’t read like a learnt essay forced towards the question.
Your essay shows a familiarity with the text and the central ideas explored.
Quotes are picked carefully to support points and allow development of language analysis.
A)You ‘explode’ the quote picking out key words and phrases and commenting on the effect of these; you are aiming to identify layers of meaning. B) Awareness of dramatic devices.
You show an understanding of the way that the writer addresses fundamental human concerns (e.g. morality, love, war). Looking at example paragraphs: Approximate Grade E 4.1 Considered/qualified response to task
= Your essay answers the question; it doesn’t read like a learnt essay forced towards the question
4.2 Considered/qualified response to text
= Your essay shows a familiarity with the text and the central ideas explored
4.3 Details linked to interpretation
= Quotes are picked carefully to support points and allow development of language analysis
4.4 Appreciation/consideration of writer’s uses of language and/or form and/or structure and effect on readers/audience
= You ‘explode’ the quote picking out key words and phrases and commenting on the effect of these; you are aiming to identify layers of meaning
= You show an awareness of the dramatic devices that Priestley uses to create meaning
4.5 Thoughtful consideration of ideas/themes
= You show an understanding of the way that the writer addresses fundamental human concerns (e.g. morality, love, war). What does this mean? Mark Band 5
21-25 marks Students demonstrate:
5.1 Exploratory response to task
5.2 Exploratory response to text
5.3 Analytical use of details to support interpretation
5.4 Analysis of writer’s uses of language and/or structure and/or form and effects on readers/audience
5.5 Exploration of ideas/themes

Structure and style are used effectively to render meaning clear. Syntax and spelling are used with a high degree of accuracy.
Mark Band 4
16-20 marks Students demonstrate:
4.1 Considered/qualified response to task
4.2 Considered/qualified response to text
4.3 Details linked to interpretation
4.4 Appreciation/consideration of writer’s uses of language and/or form and/or structure and effect on readers/audience
4.5 Thoughtful consideration of ideas/themes

Information is presented in a way which assists with communication of meaning. Syntax and spelling are generally accurate. http://web.aqa.org.uk/qual/newgcses/english/english-literature-materials.php?id=01 Assessment Criteria To show an understanding of the assessment criteria
To write a paragraph that meets the assessment criteria Objectives An Inspector Calls 1:
Writing successful paragraphs Topic Differences in class and wealth
Public and private behaviour
Morality
Political /views
Personal Responsibility
Romantic Relationships
Generational Conflict
Time
The Role of Women Your turn. Write a paragraph to address one theme: Your essay answers the question; it doesn’t read like a learnt essay forced towards the question.
Your essay shows a familiarity with the text and the central ideas explored.
Quotes are picked carefully to support points and allow development of language analysis.
A)You ‘explode’ the quote picking out key words and phrases and commenting on the effect of these; you are aiming to identify layers of meaning. B) Awareness of dramatic devices.
You show an understanding of the way that the writer addresses fundamental human concerns (e.g. morality, love, war). One way that Priestley explores the theme of morality is by using the Inspector to expose the uncompassionate nature of the Birlings. For example, he tells Sheila ‘You used the power you had... to punish the girl’. In this instance, the Inspector is forcing Sheila to come to terms with the consequences of her complaint about Eva’s service; we learn that the complaints were simply the result of her feelings of vanity and jealousy. Priestley is arguing that we need to be more moral than that. Priestley has the Inspector use the personal pronoun ‘you’ to make Sheila feel directly responsible. The emotive term ‘punish’ is used to emphasise the effect that Sheila’s complaint had on Eva’s life. This is contrasted with the fortunate position (‘power’) that Sheila has. It is through the device of the Inspector that Priestley is able to show that his view that such harsh treatment of vulnerable people is immoral.

Marker’s Commentary:

See C grade comments. In addition, the candidate:
Focuses on the device of the Inspector in the topic sentence;
More focus on Priestley’s intentions;
More language analysis
A structure point Looking at example paragraphs: Approximate Grade A
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