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BASIC AP STYLE & WRITING ISSUES

Follow-up on the lottery winner story
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Charles Twardy

on 20 November 2016

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Transcript of BASIC AP STYLE & WRITING ISSUES

BASIC AP STYLE & OTHER WRITING ISSUES
TIME ELEMENT
MONEY
He won sixty million dollars.
THAT'S THAT
NOT NEEDED
SPELL NAMES RIGHT!
CHECK!
ALL'S WELL
THAT ENDS WELL
hard news
He won on November 15, 2016
Abbreviate all months with dates except March, April, May & June
Use year only after one year
Use day of week w/in one week, past or future
.
He won Tuesday
Use numerals after one through nine
Print: Use $; Broadcast spell out
dollars
.
He won $40,100,000.
Write out million, billion, trillion
He won $40.1 million
60




$
He learned that he had won.
, USUALLY
THAT'S THE PLAN
They plan on moving.
to move.
DOUBLE-CHECK!
Doctors without Boarders
LOOK IT UP!
inverted pyramid
direct lead
NEWS FEATURE
story ends on last fact.
DELAYED LEAD
needs definite ending
Not the "moral of the story," but something that suits the tone
But he said his lottery playing days are over.
"They say lightning strikes once, and I've been struck."
GET QUOTES RIGHT
Castle said he "just lets the computer pick for him."
"I just let the computer pick for me", Castle said.
for me," he said.
7-Eleven
Stop Be-ing
They will be taking
a trip to Paris
take
Needless to say...
(so don't say it)
ASK SOURCE ABOUT NAME;
USE FULL NAME FIRST
POWIS JASPER CASTLE
POWIS J. CASTLE
POWIS CASTLE
ON 2ND REFERENCE, USE LAST NAME
DON'T DELAY LEAD TOO MUCH; GET KEY INFO IN
He won $60 million Saturday, intro'd Wednesday
& he's from Raleigh
MIX IT UP!
Castle said he will retire soon. ...

Castle said he does not want to change. ...

Castle said he almost fell off the couch. ...
Avoid starting paragraphs and sentences the same way
Once he finishes his last two jobs, Castle plans to retire. After that, he plans to visit Florida. Then he plans to take his wife to Paris.
Once he finishes his last two jobs, Castle plans to retire. After that, he will visit Florida. Then his wife will get the trip to Paris she's always wanted.
Use quotes to illustrate, back up or drive home a point
“We’re very lucky to have Andres Duany onboard with this,” Hitchcock said. Duany is the co-founder of Duany Plater-Zyberk & Co. in Miami and a pioneer of "new urbanist" design. He will be the lead architect on the project.
instead:
Andres Duany, co-founder of Duany Plater-Zyberk & Co. in Miami and a pioneer of "new urbanist" design, will be the lead architect on the project. “We’re very lucky to have Andres Duany onboard with this,” Hitchcock said.
Get the main point -- what's this all about? -- established 1st; then fill in other details.
Real estate developer David Hitchcock said Friday that he plans to develop a “new urbanist” community on 125 acres of farmland south of Winterville.
His vision for the community is a village that will include apartments, single-family homes and shopping areas. All would be in close proximity to each other so residents can walk to any destination.
“This will be a real town all by itself, but with access to Highway 11 so people can get to Greenville easily,” Hitchcock said. “The idea is to make it possible for people to walk to schools, parks and stores.”
DIRECT LEAD
EXPLAINS
QUOTE ILLUSTRATES INFO
Organize the rest:
architecture firm, what it's known for, its cofounder
where is it exactly?
quote about Duany
intro Smoak, say she will work under Duany
her quote about challenge
the zoning issue, why planning board?
Gaskins' quote
Real estate developer David Hitchcock ...
A real estate developer, David Hitchcock, ...
Winterville Planning Board Chair Shirona Gaskins ...
The chair of the planning board, Shirona Gaskins, ...
Asked what she thought of the proposal, Shirona Gaskins, chair of the planning board, said, "I'd love to support it, but they've got to show me it will work."
"I'd love to support it, but they've got to show me it will work," Shirona Gaskins, the chair of the planning board, said.
Quotes & Commas
EXPLAIN
/
HOW
Horace explained how he didn't like "The Walking Dead."
only use explained when actually explaining
don't use
how
to mean
that
Horace said that he didn't like "The Walking Dead."
DEATH TO JARGON!
Police said the perpetrator was likely a white male aged 40-50 employed by an agency of higher education in the local area.
Police said the thief is probably a middle-aged white man who works at ECU or PCC.
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