Grab a whiteboard...
3. Leader continues to talk - what does he want them for and why? - more speech, use your speech punctuation we practised.
2a phrase - magical, mystical pebble from the... to ...
clearest, cleanest water from the ... to ...
fluffiest, largest feather from the ... to ...
4. Tell the reader what kind of elf/pixie/dwarf needs to take on this mission and why? De:de
The journey is very dangerous: nobody has ever survived it before.
1. Speech opener - choose your favourite, or write another new one to start your paragraph
2. Tell me who he is speaking to. What are they all doing? Are they listening? Where are they?
The small clearing in the forest was full of tiny pixies, who all had a confused look on their faces. They were too busy trying to imagine what could possibly be wrong to listen to their leader!
Quest
Opening Paragraph
Blodden's Quest - The Opener
"Stop talking, and listen!" shouted Tremdalf, shaking his bony fist at the assembled company of dwarfs. There was silence. "It's no use arguing among yourselves. We have to get that magic herb somehow. Terebron needs it to make his potions. The success of the whole war against the Orcs depends on it." No-one disagreed. But who should go? The was was long and hard and success could not be guaranteed. The herb did not always flower. Everyone continued to tell his neighbour why he could not possibly be spared from his daily work. Then, into the clamour, a shrill voice sounded. "I'll go! Let me get the herb!" A laugh filled the cave, lit by a thousand blinking fireflies. "What! Blodden! He couldn't find a piece of rofal in a paper bag!" More laughter filled the room. The little dwarf's face burned with shame, but he felt anger welling up inside too. He'd show them - and, leaping to his feet, he jumped forward and grabbed the map to the enchanted forest out of a surprised Tremdalf's hands.
Using Direct Speech
The opening of Blodden's Quest starts with speech - why does the author do this?
What speech could you start with? What might your leader say? He wants to get everybody's attention - how might he do this?
Write 5 phrases which the character might say on your whiteboard and 5 things he might do
Let's create a sequence...
Putting them into a sentence
- Speech opener - leader trying to get their attention.
- Way to introduce the other creatures there - who is he talking to? Are they listening?
- He tells them what he wants and why.
- You need to tell us that the route will be difficult.
- Explain that nobody wanted to do it.
- Suddenly a voice is heard - who is it? What does he say?
- How do the others react?
- What is your main character's reaction to this?
Have a go on your sentence strip
Red - direct speech
Blue - said phrase
White - subordinate clause
5. Was anybody volunteering? What were they doing instead of volunteering?
Everyone made up excuses of why they couldn't go.
Everyone fell silent and looked to the floor
Nobody wanted to help, they all turned away from the leader.
6. Suddenly - what do they hear
The silence was broken suddenly by...
Out of nowhere, a voice was heard
Direct speech to show what the brave pixie said.
7. How do the other creatures react to him volunteering?
8. What does the main character do?