The day I reached the South Pole...

The day I reached the South Pole...

Wednesday 29th March 2017

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Something bad happens...

Avalanche

Describe how you feel stuck under the snow

How do you try to get attention?

Who or what saves you?

How do you feel when you are out?

• Not there is - you are there!
• Remember this is a diary - think about how the things you are describing are affecting you!

• Onomatopoeia
• Brackets
• Physical features
• Fronted adverbial
• De:de sentence
• The more, the more sentence

Things to include...

• Hyphen
• 2a sentence
• 4a sentence
• Personification
• Simile

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As I continued South East - following my compass - I approached Mount Vinson. It stood proudly above the blanket of ice. I looked up to try and realise the scale of the beast, but the clouds covered the tip. I walked further into the shadows of the monster, then heard an thunderous roar coming from above, it was like the roar of a tempest, but I knew the sea was too far behind me. As I looked up, a snowslide was heading straight for me. Closing my eyes, I hoped for the best. I'm not sure how long my eyes were closed for, I think I must have been knocked unconscious from the impact of the heavy snow. As I lay covered with the icy blanket, my whole body began to tremble. My eyes didn't seem to be working properly. Although I was covered with lily-white snow, all I could see was ebony-black. Cold, wet and alone - I didn't know which of these was worse! I thought my life was over. I had no choice but to try and dig my way out, every time I moved some snow, more replaced it and I felt like I was getting trapped tighter and tighter. I began to scream for help, desperate cries left my mouth, no words were formed, just piercing, shrill cries. Just as I was about to give up, I head barking, then scratching above my head. Somehow, my faithful dogs had managed to get me out of this awful prison cell.

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• Where are you now? Think about where the snow is going to fall from
• How do you know where to go?
• When do you realise there is an avalanche? Describe the sound
• How do you feel?
• What do you do? Stay and pray? Run away?
• Show some time has passed and you awake amongst the snow
• What is it like? 2 descriptions
• 3 bad dash sentence
• How do you try and get out?
• Do you shout for help?
• What can you hear?
• How are you saved?

Dear Diary,

Today has been the worst day yet!

I woke this morning and, for a moment, imagined I was back home with my loving family. As I felt the icy breeze slap me across the face, I realised I was still in Antarctica, still desperately hoping to reach the South Pole. Praying for a break in the blizzard, I cautiously stepped outside of the tent. Unfortunately, the snow was still falling heavily, I knew today would be difficult! As I packed up my belongings; sleeping bag, small trangia (a gas cooker), diary and the ever dwindling food rations, I realised we were another team member down. I couldn't hang around hoping for him to return, I had to continue, or it could be me that disappeared next.

Setting Description of the Antarctic

What might you describe?

• Dear Diary
• Opening sentence to explain how bad today has been!
• Waking up - what might you be thinking? Do you imagine you are somewhere else? Where would you rather be?
• What reminds you of where you are?
• 3 ed sentence
• ing, ed sentence - what are you hoping for? What other word could you use instead of hoping?
• What is the weather like? Personification?
• How do you feel?
• What do you do before you set off?
• ; list (commas in a list - four items)
• Are you on your own? Is there anyone else there? Where is everyone?

The Arctic powder-white snow, which lay around me, made it extremely difficult to walk, but I am starting to get used to it. The trick is to not keep your feet on the ground for too long or you begin to sink and it's really hard to get them out! With every step, the snow crunches and crackles under my tired, heavy feet. The bleak, empty landscape all around me was lifeless, I felt like I was the only living thing out there today! The screeching wind circled around my head and the deafening sound is still ringing in my ears. My tingling, numb feet are glad of the warmth I have here tonight inside my safe, cosy tent.