Safari

Second Draft 80

Second Revision 87

Had to fix my writing. Used to many "I"s

Final Revision 97

Third 89

Minor fixes to make. Mrs. Zenion how I looped the conclusion back to the introduction.

That was an experience

Added quotes and statistics to improve my paper.

Stalking my prey for

my peer profile

Revision 75

Revision #1 82

Mrs. Zenion colored on my paper and left comments

Running through the collaborative paper with my woes

Mrs. Zenion is telling me to work on my conclusion and fallacy

Final Revision 100

Stomping on the argument paper like a stampede.

First Draft

Draft

Grade 75

Got to meet someone through an interview

First Draft 70

Worked on this with Anthony Greg and Connor

Thought it was an A. Guess not.

Revision 2

Cleaned up my paper and got an 89

By

Evan Finnegan

URI Writing is like going on a Safari