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Introductions & Thesis statements

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Transcript of Introductions & Thesis statements

The College Essay is a an analytical essay that will use textual evidence to answer a prompt.

A college essay includes:

Introduction paragraph (with thesis statement)
3 body paragraphs
Conclusion paragraph

This presentation will focus on introductions and thesis statements.
The College Essay: Introductions
The Hook
The "hook" is the first sentence of your introduction, and its purpose is to grab your reader's attention.

Some ideas for coming up with a strong hook:

An unusual detail
A strong statement
A statistic or fact
A question
An outrageous or exaggerated statement
Summary of the topic
Provide a short summary of the topic so the reader has some context for your essay.

Part of your summary should include i
ntroducing the relevant text(s) and the author of the text(s).

Example:

In the novel The Glass Castle, by Jeannette Walls, the author describes the unique childhood she had with her unconventional parents.
Introductions
The Introduction paragraph of an essay serves to:

Grab the reader's interest

Let the reader know what you're writing about (summarize the topic and give the name of the text and author)

State your argument (the THESIS statement)


Introduction =
Hook + Summary & name of text & author + Thesis
The College Essay: Introductions & Thesis Statements
What is a thesis statement?
A thesis statement is a sentence in an essay that serves as the guide for the essay and answers the question or prompt asked of you.
The thesis represents the opinion that you are arguing.

A thesis statement:

Addresses the prompt clearly
Makes a claim or presents an argument
Is arguable (has an opinion)
Is the LAST sentence in the introduction paragraph of an essay
What is a thesis statement?
A thesis statement should NOT
:

Be a factual statement or topic sentence
Example: Alaska is the largest state in the nation.

Be more than one sentence

Include "In this paper, I will..." or "The purpose of this essay is..."
Thesis statement practice
In the following examples, read the prompt and the two statements. Choose the one that is the best choice for a thesis statement.
Prompt
:
Many political leaders have gone beyond their official duties and become true humanitarians. In a well-developed essay, discuss who you believe to be the greatest political leader of our lifetime and why you chose this person.

a. The greatest political leader of our lifetime is Nelson Mandela, who was the first Black president of South Africa.

b. The greatest political leader of our lifetime was Nelson Mandela, because he fought racism with forgiveness, he worked to combat poverty, and set up a charity to benefit those affected with HIV and AIDS.
Thesis statement practice
Prompt
:
Many students struggle with the financial burden of paying for parking at SMC. College officials, however, say that they need this extra money to support college activities. In a well-developed essay, explain whether the college should require students to pay for parking.

a. Students should not have to pay for parking at school because it may prevent those who cannot afford parking from attending school, it can cause students to leave class early to deal with parking issues, and it reduces the amount of money students can spend on educational supplies.

b. Students should not have to pay for parking at school because it's not fair and financial aid doesn't cover it.
Thesis statement practice
For each pair of sentences, select the one that you believe would be an effective thesis statement. Keep in mind that an entire essay will need to be developed around this thesis statement.

a. There is no question that cell phones have changed our lives in a big way.

b. Cell phones have changed our lives by providing freedom and mobility, but they can also become a leash that prevents people from living in the moment and makes them more likely to disengage in social settings.
a. Like other addictive behaviors, Internet addiction may have serious negative consequences include academic failure, job loss, and a breakdown in personal relationships.

b. Internet addiction is a major problem in the world today, and many people suffer from it.
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a. There are some serious objections to the violence and graphic nature of today's horror movies.

b. Many people believe today's horror movies are dangerous because modern cinematic techniques have allowed filmmakers to get more graphic, horror films have desensitized young American viewers to violence, and movies are more easily accessible to children who may be too young to view them.
Example:
Would you expect a good parent to allow her 3-year old child to boil her own hot dogs?

Crafting a thesis
One of the most effective ways to write a thesis statement is to
answer the prompt directly and then follow it with the THREE most compelling reasons that support your answer.

These three reasons will then become your three body paragraphs.

In the following two questions, identify the 3 specific reasons that are given.
Answer to the Prompt:

Nelson Mandela is the greatest political leader

Reason 1:

He fought racism with forgiveness

Reason 2:

He worked to combat poverty

Reason 3:

He set up a charity to benefit those affected by HIV and AIDS.
Answer to the Prompt:

Students should not have to pay for parking

Reason 1
:
It may prevent those who cannot afford parking from attending school

Reason 2:

It can cause students to leave class early to deal with parking issues

Reason 3:
It reduces the amount of money students have available to spend on educational supplies
Thesis statement practice
Prompt
: In a well-developed essay, discuss the social and academic effects of having a full-time job on college students today.


Thesis statement practice
Prompt
: Many people worry that technology inhibits creativity, and they suggest that it has no place in the classroom. In a well-argued essay, explain the benefits of incorporating technology into high school and / or college classrooms.


Evaluating Introductions
INTRO 1

Parenting is one of the important things in a child's life. It guides them through decisions, learning from mistakes, and shows the bond between parent and child. But people who don't show any good parenting can lead their children into a rough life. In the book The Glass Castle, by Jeannette Walls, she talks about her life experiences and the struggles she went through because of the mistakes of her parents. Rex and Rose Mary Walls were unfit parents because they were reckless, didn't show concern for their children's safety, and were very selfish parents.
INTRO 2

In the book The Glass Castle by Jeannette Walls, the author shows how Rex and Rose Mary Walls are unfit parents. Rex and Rose Mary Walls were very unfit parents because they were selfish, they didn't really provide for them, and they kept giving false hope to the children. They didn't show any compassion to their children.
INTRO 3

How would someone feel if they grew up always running from problems just because their parents couldn't face them? In the book The Glass Castle, by Jeannette Walls, the author deals with the problem of growing up with three siblings, poverty, and not the best role models in her young life. Rex and Rose Mary Walls are unfit parents because they show a significant lack of responsibility, safety, and care for their children.
INTRO 4

It is a common idea that everyone's childhood is the best time of their lives. As children it is believed to be a time of freedom, happiness, safety, and no responsibilities; however, not every child could agree with this. In the novel The Glass Castle by Jeannette Walls, it tells the story of three children and the childhood they lived with their irresponsible parents. The novel shows the consequences a child could have if they have unfit parents while they are growing up. Although Rex and Rose Mary Walls' intentions are to help their children become self-sufficient adults, the way they try to achieve this goal unfortunately harms the children physically, emotionally, and mentally.
INTRO 5

The Walls family has truly had some hard times. There's no doubt that Rex and Rose Mary Walls were unfit parents. Their lack of nurturing, sustainability and ability to lead and provide for their four children has put them through a whole lot more than the average kid can handle. In the book The Glass Castle, a narrative by Jeannette Walls, the author takes us on an adventure through her youth.
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