ENGL E101F Wk 9 S1_L17

Assignment 2 Part 1

Assignment 2 Part 1

Assignment 2 Part 1

a short, amusing account of something that has happened

background information + your own views

Assignment 2 Part 1

Regarding your own views:

• Reasons for naming the streets
• Cultural background e.g. after places in China / the UK
• Do you think it is an appropriate way to name the streets?
• What should be the appropriate way then?

Preparing your speech

4 - 5 minutes

Suggested organisation of the speech

1. Introduction: talk very briefly about what you are going to do

Overview

Preparing your speech

According to naming Sesame Street by CNN, ...

2. Talk about the two videos

• Background of the naming of the two streets - Sesame Street and Liu Xiaobo Plaza
• Remember to acknowledge the source e.g. introduce where ideas are from - CNN or BBC

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3. Naming of streets e.g. in Hong Kong

• How?
• Any interesting stories

4. Your views and conclusion

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Teacher-marked writing: draft

Teacher-marked writing: revision (correction)

• Do the correction on your draft
• Underline the corrections

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Self-improvement:

Self-improvement form

• If you have made changes, remember to modify it.
• The final version should be submitted with the sample works

Don't forget to complete the last part on the obstacles and solutions

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Sample works

• Submitted via OLE

• compile everything in one document
• following the order in the check list

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• Evidence
• Evidence of your effort of improvement
• Evidence of your improvement

Quality is more important than quantity.

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Self-chosen writing:

Unit 1

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Self-chosen writing:

Unit 2

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Self-chosen writing:

Unit 3

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Self-chosen writing:

Unit 4

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Self-chosen writing:

Unit 5

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candid: be honest

Short Reflection:

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Marking criteria:

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Comments

Generally, the flow has mostly been presented correctly.

Please remember to include only relevant information such as pain, physical and psychological symptoms.

Bear the two rules in mind.

Comments

'Verb' is an essential element.

However, pay attention to how we should transform fragments into complete sentences.

Need to check grammar especially 'tense' and 'articles'.

Generally past unless it is something that happens today.

'Articles': a, an & the

Comments

acute throbbing chest pain (left side). Affecting left thumb.

pain: a sharp pain, an acute pain, a throbbing pain

an acute throbbing chest pain

side: the right, the left e.g. on the right; on the left

• an acute throbbing chest pain on the left side/ an acute throbbing pain on the left chest
• affected the left thumb

During the attack

Comments

Be careful with the following.

The verb is missing.

During the attack, rapid pulse rate and increased respiration rate.

Active in voice

The verb is performed by the subject 'He"?

He increased pulse rate.

He has become rapid pulse rate.

During the attack, the pulse rate was rapid and the respiration rate increased.

Comments

right but we seldom put it this way

was attacked by ...

had attacked vs had an attack

had attacked: active

The action is done by the subject i.e. Mr Smith

had attacks / an attack = received attacks / an attack

Mr Smith is passive

Comments

We suffer from an illness but not suffer from something we cannot do.

suffer from hypertension but not an unclear speech

have an unclear speech

Comments

The order that symptoms appear in the description

in the past

Time adverbials that help:

• In the previous week; During attack; Later; Two days ago
• Today

in the present

thus use tense correctly accordingly

Description of Bob Smith's symptoms

Last week attacks of dizziness with nausea and vomiting for 4 days

Last week, Mr Bob Smith had attacks of dizziness with nausea and vomited for 4 days.

Last week, Mr Bob Smith suffered attacks of dizziness with nausea and vomited for 4 days.

Last week, Mr Bob Smith had attacks of dizziness with nausea and vomited. Such situation lasted for 4 days.

Mr Bob Smith had attacks of dizziness with nausea and vomited for 4 days last week.

Description of Bob Smith's symptoms

During attack, rapid pulse rate and increased respiration rate.

adjective

During the attack, his pulse rate was rapid and his respiration rate increased.

verb

During the attack, Mr Smith had a rapid pulse rate and an increased respiration rate.

adjective

Description of Bob Smith's symptoms

During the attack, his pulse rate was rapid with an increased respiration rate.

During the attack, Mr Bob Smith’s pulse rate and respiration rate increased.

Description of Bob Smith's symptoms

Later, acute throbbing chest pain (left side). Affecting left thumb.

Later, he suffered an acute throbbing chest pain on the left side and this affected his left thumb.

Later, there was an acute throbbing chest pain on the left side which affected the left thumb.

Later, he suffered from an acute throbbing pain in the left chest which affected his left thumb.

Description of Bob Smith's symptoms

Worse at night. Better after sleep.

He felt worse at night, but better after sleep.

The pain got worse at night, but became better after sleep.

was relieved

The situation got worse at night/ The symptoms got worse at night but became better after sleep.

Description of Bob Smith's symptoms

Hissing in right ear two days ago.

Two days ago, Mr Smith had a hissing in his right ear.

Two days ago, Mr Smith heard a hissing in the right ear.

Description of Bob Smith's symptoms

Two days ago, Mr Smith heard some hissing sounds in his right ear.

Two days ago, hissing sounds appeared in Mr Bob Smith’s right ear.

Description of Bob Smith's symptoms

Sweat at night. Muscle weakness.

He also sweated at night and suffered/experienced muscle weakness.

Also, his muscle became weak and he was sweating all night.

He sweated at night and had the symptom of muscle weakness.

Description of Bob Smith's symptoms

Today with unclear speech

Today, he speaks unclearly.

Today, he has an unclear speech.

Today, he is unable to speak clearly.

Comments

It is different from auditory hallucination which is a psychological symptom.

hissing

• 'hissing' here is regarded as a physical symptom
• may be the result of the problems with the ear or with the brain

unclear speech

• can be both, depending on symptoms mentioned before
• can be a physical symptom because of 'stroke' or 'brain tumor'

Description of Bob Smith's symptoms

Last week, Mr Bob Smith had attacks of dizziness with nausea and vomited for 4 days. During the attack, his pulse was rapid and his respiration rate increased. Later, he suffered an acute throbbing pain on the left chest which affected his left thumb. The pain got worse at night and was relieved after sleep. Two days ago, Mr Smith had a hissing in his right ear. He also sweated at night and experienced muscle weakness. Today, he is unable to speak clearly.

Diagnosis Description

Patients usually worry about their illness and want to know what has happened. Nurses then need to explain the diagnosis to them.

Therefore, we need to pay attention to the language used.

P. 16, 17, 18 & 19

Diagnosis Description

From the doctor's examination and the MRI result, Mr Hall was diagnosed to have a prolapsed intervertebral disc on lumbar spine.

prolapsed: moved down from its normal position

What is a prolapsed intervertebral disc on lumbar spine?

Diagnosis: Language rules

Do you think the patient is able to understand what is happening?

This is the description in the textbook.

Diagnosis Description

Now listen to the conversation between Rebecca (the nurse) and Mr Kevin Hall. Complete the script to find out what happened to Mr Hall.

Also, how Rebecca explained it to him.

Diagnosis Description

Diagnosis Description

Diagnosis Description

Diagnosis: Language rules

Compare:

Gristle is a tough, rubbery substance found in meat, especially in meat of poor quality, which is unpleasant to eat.

The disc is a little pad of gristle which lies between the bones in the spine. And you have damaged the disc and it is pressing on a nerve causing the pain in the back and the nerve.

Sciatica is a severe pain in the nerve in your legs or the lower part of your back.

Diagnosis: Language rules

Protrude: stick out

By lifting heavy loads in the wrong way, you can damage the disc.

Diagnosis: Language rules

impinge: affect to a some extent

stenosis: an abnormal narrowing

It may cause significant narrowing of the spinal canal and this will likely cause significant symptoms of numbness, weakness or pain in the legs.

Diagnosis: Language rules

medical terminology

1. Avoid _________________________ where possible and define them in ______________.

simple ways

Diagnosis: Language rules

effects

causes

conditional

2. Explanations often involve describing ________ and ________. Use _____________ sentences to link the two parts.

If we straighten our knee, the nerve goes taut and it becomes painful again.

Diagnosis: Language rules

present

3. Both cause and effect are in _______ tense because we are describing something which __________________.

is generally true

The disc is a little pad of gristle which lies between the bones in your spine.

Diagnosis: Language rules

One last rule: when talking about recovery

Use of modality to show different degrees of certainty.

Diagnosis: Language rules

P.19

Modality

Probably

Likely

Must,

Definitely

Have to

Could

May

Perhaps

Doesn't seem

A possibility

Definitely not

Must not

Exclude

Rule out

Diagnosis Description: Language rules

1. Use simple terms

2. conditional sentences for causes and

effects

3. Present tense for general truth

4. Modality for the degree of certainty

Examination

Don't write down your name!

Examination

There are 3 parts:

• Good time management
• Read the instructions carefully
• Reserve at least 5 minutes to have a final check on writing

Examination

Practice

Part I: Listening (25 marks)

Time: 30 minutes

Practice

Two sections

• a talk by a representative of the Hong Kong Adventure Tour Association
• four interviews about adventurous trips

Suggested answers

No marks will be given to key words that have been spelt wrong.

Your notes should not be too close to the answers. This makes everything confusing.

Mind your handwriting. Make sure that markers understand what you are writing.

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Points to remember

• The answers should be precise and clear otherwise no marks will be given.

• Make sure that your answers are complete.

• Mind your word choices.

Suggested answers

Here are some common errors.

Examples:

• not swimming all the way
• not swimming all the way resting for a week as he was sick

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• The wind worked against them.
• The wind condition.
• The wind is so strong.

• Skiing down Mount Everest.
• Skiing down the highest place.

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• To reclaim his record of being the oldest man who claims Mt Everest.
• to reclaim his record

• Electromagnetic device protected him from predators.
• protect him from sharks

• It was exhausting riding down hill ...
• ride down

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Section 1:

1. Which of the following statements about Antarctica are TRUE?

i) Antarctica is a desert. ii) Antarctica is smaller than South America in size.

a

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2. Name ONE condition which hinders the growth of plants in Antarctica.

freezing temperature/ poor soil quality/

lack of moisture/ lack of sunlight

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flood(s)/ flooding

3. If the Antarctic Ice Sheet melted completely, it would cause ___________________ in many low-lying areas in the world. Also, the dilution of sea salt concentration would upset _________________________________/_________________________ in the sea.

(the) ocean

current(s) (systems)

water current circle(s)

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4. Most visitors enter Antarctica by flying from Australia, New Zealand and Chili.

No

Key: Most visitors

They usually travel by ship.

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Not about activities

5. Why is summer the best time to visit Antarctica? Give TWO reasons.

Also

• The weather is relatively warmer and daylight longer.
• This is the time when penguins, birds and seals mate / You will find the land crowded with animals.

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6. Which TWO overnight options do visitors have if they go to Antarctica?

i) stay on the cruise

ii) camp on the ice

rely on the facilities on board

stay on the crew

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7. What tips does Mr Wong give to people who plan to visit Antarctica? Name ONE.

a cruise with an onshore option /

choose a smaller cruise

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Section 2: Interview 1

1. How many times has Dr Lee travelled to Antarctica?

6 (times)

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2. Dr Lee fell into the water when the Antarctic ice shelf cracked during her third visit.

No

Not her but a member of her team

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3. What institution did Dr Lee want to set up in Hong Kong?

A polar museum

The China Polar Museum Foundation is an organization founded by Dr Lee.

Suggested answers: Interview 2

1. Which three world records has Mr Miura held?

• Top skiing speed/ A skiing speed of 172 km/hr
• Skiing down Mt. Everest
• The oldest person who climbed Mt. Everest

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2. Why does Mr Miura want to climb Mt Everest again in 2013?

• He wants to reclaim his title as the oldest person who climbed Mt Everest.

Suggested answers: Interview 3

1. Why did Mr Lecomte decide to swim across the Atlantic Ocean?

c. He wanted the public to care about cancer research.

Suggested answers

technology

2. How did technology help Mr Lecomte in his swimming adventure?

• The electromagnetic device protected him from predators.
• Modern techniques in swimming clothes protected him from the cold water / freezing.

no marks if the devices are not mentioned

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3. What criticism did Mr Lecomte receive?

• Some people criticised that he did not swim all the way / that he stopped mid-way.

Suggested answers: Interview 4

1. Which direction did Sue and her husband travel?

c. From west to east.

2. How did Sue's nephew and her husband in the trip?

ii) He arranged supplies during the trip.

iii) He prepared the food for the couple.

b

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3. Name the two difficulties Sue mentioned in the interview.

• exhausting to ride downhill in the Rockies
• the wind often worked against them in the Prairies.

Implication on preparing your speech

Pay attention to the organization of the talk.

• Has it a proper opening? Any hints on what the speaker is going to talk about?
• Any outline of sections?
• What about strategies to help listeners?

Implication on preparing your speech

Has it a proper opening?

• Good evening, ladies and gentlemen. Thank you very much for coming to this talk. My name is Johnson Wong and I come from the Hong Kong Adventure Tour Association. I am honoured to be here to share with you my knowledge of Antarctica.

Implication on preparing your speech

Any outline of sections?

• Today I would first talk to you briefly about Antarctica, its geography, its wild life and its significance. I would also like to make use of this opportunity to introduce to you some unusual activities it offers and give you some tips to anyone who is planning to visit Antarctica in the near future.

Implication on preparing your speech

Strategies to help listeners

its geography: location, climate & vegetation

its wild life

• So first, where is Antarctica ...
• As for the animal that lives in Antarctica, again I guess all of you know what it is ... There are also many other marine animals ...
• Now I believe many of you may wonder what's so special about Antarctica. Why should I care about it? ...

its significance

Implication on preparing your speech

Strategies to help listeners

• Since Antarctica is such an important place in the world, anyone who wishes to visit needs to obtain a permit. The number of visitors is strictly controlled so as to avoid destruction and contanination.
• Most visitors venture to Antarctica ... Most popular activities ...

unusual activities

Implication on preparing your speech

Strategies to help listeners

some tips

• Finally I have a few tips for the brave souls who plan to visit Antarctica.
• First ...
• I have a second tip ...
• I hope that by now you have a better understanding of Antarctica ...
• also hope that ...

signal that the talk is getting close to the end