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  Hi, everyone.

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  I thought to make a quick video to share with

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  you a little bit of writing that we did in

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  class this morning to do with our Victorian story.

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  I'm not sure how much he written of this.

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  We didn't get that much done before.

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  Half term holiday.

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  So we're continuing with it this a few weeks now.

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  Just get a good narrative written down.

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  I thought I would just read out the writing that

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  I did on the board this morning with a few

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  ideas from the Children on have also put a photograph

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  of that on our class page.

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  If you want to enlarge that so you can read

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  and see some ideas now, hopefully, you've tried to put

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  in some detail about what you know about the Victorian

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  period into your Victorian story to make it sound more

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  historically accurate.

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  So we were talking about Oliver and the fact that

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  it's set in the workhouse, so that's a clue that

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  is in the Victorian times that they sold a boy

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  for £5.

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  Boys were workings and undertakers as chimney sweeps the transport

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  in London's the carriages and the horses tell us that

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  it wasn't in the modern day, and the boys were

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  drinking gin in Fagan's den, for instance.

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  There's lots of clues along the way that it was

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  set in Victorian times, so hopefully managed to add some

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  of those.

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  Well, we also talked about the fact the language features

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  were different.

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  They were used some different phrases, and some of the

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  language was quite old fashioned.

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  Andi tried to put some of that into our story

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  as well.

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  So I'm going to just read to you now little

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  extract that we did this morning, just as an example

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  that might help you with yours.

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  On the dark streets of London, a child was left

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  all alone, wrapped in the thing but old, tattered shore.

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  It was a piteous sight on one that would be

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  hard for any eye to see.

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  It wasn't long before Annie came along basket in hand,

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  busily walking along with the noisy alleyway consumed by the

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  thoughts of tonight's meeting with her fiance, Mr Constable.

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  She stopped, paused and blinked.

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  Her basket hit the pavement as she ran towards the

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  baby. So that's our opening.

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  So we've tried toe set the scene a little bit

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  by saying on the dark streets of London.

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  We've put a child was left because we're going to

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  put an orphan into our story.

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  Be inspired a little bit about by Oliver Twist on

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  the fact there was lots of orphans in those days

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  for lots of various different reasons.

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  We tried to put some examples off a good description.

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  So a piteous sight you could see the word pity

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  within the word piteous.

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  So it means it's it.

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  It's unfortunate state.

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  So a site you would feel sorry for feel pity

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  about. And one thing that was how would be hard

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  for any eye to see.

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  So we haven't just said it was a difficult sight

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  to see.

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  It was so horrible to see an abandoned chair that

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  was going to be hard for anyone to have a

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  look at.

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  Then we've said that character called Annie came along.

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  Now we've tried to use a name that would have

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  bean popular in Victorian times, not one that's too modern

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  on. We've said that she's busily walking along.

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  She's got a basket in her hand, so it's not

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  too modern.

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  She's carrying her shopping in her basket on.

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  She's consumed by thoughts of her fiance.

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  So it's not just thinking about him.

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  She's consumed, which means she can't stop thinking about him.

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  And we put the word Mr Constables, we discussed the

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  fact those days, really that you you would be very

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  formal with the people that you knew so you wouldn't

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  necessarily call everybody by their first name.

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  And so we called her fiance, Mr Constable.

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  Then she stopped and put a dash.

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  Their paused and blinked in the dash basket hit the

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  payment and she ran towards the baby.

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  So, windows in your story, you can try and think

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  of some good descriptive language language that you might have

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  heard back in the Victorian times to describe what's happening

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  in your story.

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  Think about the characters carefully.

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  Think about the names that you use, and I think

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  about making it historically accurate.

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  I look forward to reading some