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Construction: Feedback
Construction: Feedback
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Our opening is face pased and adrenaline rushing as we have used fast then slow editing to make the audience feel anxious and uncertain.
Our music choice fits in well with the genre of our film as it forms a eary ambience with the use of bells and a xylophone, which are high pitched to create tension.
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Feedback criticism: our final shot features a rag doll hanging on barbed wire, which is supposed to provide a narrative clue, that the girl has dropped her favourite toy,indicating something is seriously wrong. However this did not come across.
Solution: We are going to film additional footage showing an earlier shot of the girl clearly holding the doll. Now the viewer will perhaps draw to the conclusion the girl has been snatched.
Feedback Criticism: Another audience querryied the brightness of the red colour in our playground scene. They felt it was unduly startling. We had planed this to be a visual code indicating the protagonists state of mental imbalance with red as an indication of danger.
Solution: We are able to tone these colours down in our next edit.
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Feedback criticism: The different elements when put together do have a clear narrative and do offer enigma, but as they stand still do not explain sufficiently the traumatic impact of war photography on the protagonist, seeing the suffering of women and children, which is exacerbated by her doctor's painful news that she will never have children.
Solution: Add a voice over in which the doctor delivers the news.
Our opening set up a sense of uncertainty and anxiety as our protagonist was clearly stressed and this scene was fast pased.
Her psychosis emerges clearly when she is cradling the doll.
We have created a film tat fits in with the thriller genre. There is an innocent victim, (a young child) and a menacing woman, someone who is obsessed with a doll and kidnaps a young girl.
We organised a small focus group, of our peers and older people, to attend a screening and give us feedback and constructive criticism about our film opening.
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Feedback criticism:
unclear about the function of seeing the war photographs: what meaning was the viewer supposed to attach to this?
Solution:
We decided to add battle soundtrack, to indicate how traumatic the experience was for the protagonist.
Image by Tom Mooring