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Lang Paper Two: Persuasive Writing: Inspirational Person

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Transcript of Lang Paper Two: Persuasive Writing: Inspirational Person

ATRAPPERISEE
What does each letter stand for?

Anecdote
Anecdote: a story used to illustrate a point or argument: 'Katie was thirteen when she first experienced discrimination...'.

Beginning and ending your writing with an anecdote is a highly effective strategy.
Tricolon (triplet): using three ideas in a row for emphasis:
'discrimination is
wicked, vile
and
evil
.'
Rhetorical question: a question that is used to make the reader think about a topic: 'Should anyone be treated unfairly?'
Assertion: a statement of fact or opinion: 'discrimination is wrong' and 'all people should be treated fairly'.
Personal and possessive pronouns: I, you, me, we, my, your, our...

These include and involve the reader in your aim.
Emotive language: words that aim to make the reader feel strong emotions: hate, love, evil, cruel, angry, disgusting, frustrating, wicked.
Repetition: using the same phrases more than once for impact: 'Discrimination is unfair; discrimination is unjust; discrimination is immoral.'

Increasing the power of each idea (from 'unfair' to 'immoral' is called 'amplification'.
Imperatives: bossy, command verbs: 'help us', 'go away', 'stop that', 'don't leave'.
Statistics: using numbers as evidence to support an argument: '99% of people', 'over a million children'.

Be wary of using spurious statistics.
Expert opinion: using someone who knows that they are talking to support your point: 'Rosa Parks once said...'.
Exaggeration: making over-the-top statements to emphasise your arguments: 'discrimination is the vilest, most evil behaviour in the world.
Effective Persuasive Writing
With your shoulder partner and using the
green pen
,
underline the persuasive techniques as we go through each sentence.
Cross-check
Check with the pair opposite you which of the ATRAPPERISEE methods you have found.
Who is my greatest inspiration?
What a thought-provoking question! Of all the incredible, impressive and influential people I have ever heard of or ever encountered,
who is this individual that I find the most inspirational?

Surely that’s an impossible question to answer, no?

Well, if I may, I would like to begin by sharing with you an inspiring event.
Who is my greatest inspiration? What a thought-provoking question! Of all the
incredible, impressive and influential
people I have ever heard of or ever encountered, who is this individual that I find the most inspirational? Surely that’s an impossible question to answer, no? Well, if I may, I would like to begin by sharing with you an inspiring event.
Back last summer
,
I watched someone struggle with a challenge. This young person had to perform at the Royal Albert Hall and they were worried. In fact, they were scared, terrified even. Yet, with a mountain of practice and a tidal wave of character they overcame their fear, taking to the stage and taking the crowd by storm.
Not for me the wisdom and dedication of Dr Martin Luther King Jnr: no.

Nor for me the patience and perseverance of Mahatma Ghandi: oh, no! I draw inspiration each and every day through watching the apple of my eye bud and blossom into a beautiful, kind and intelligent young person.
So,
you

probably want to ask “How does this inspiration manifest itself in
me
?” She gives me purpose;
she

gives
me

hope; she gives me every germ she has! Seriously though, seeing the fruit of

your

loom weave her way through the trials and tribulations of life is what I find truly inspiring. How could
I

possibly be inspired by anyone else?

Not for me the
wisdom
and
dedication

of Dr Martin Luther King Jnr: no. Nor for me the

patience

and
perseverance

of Mahatma Ghandi: oh, no! I draw
inspiration
each and every day through watching the
apple of my eye bud
and
blossom

into a
beautiful, kind
and
intelligent
young person.
So, you probably want to ask “How does this inspiration manifest itself in me?”
She gives me purpose; she gives me hope; she gives me every germ she has!
Seriously though, seeing the fruit of your loom weave her way through the trials and tribulations of life is what I find truly inspiring. How could I possibly be inspired by anyone else?
So, who is this person who inspires me more than any other? It’s my little girl, my daughter, my Amelie.
Let me explain.
Not really expert opinion but more using 'experts' for contrast.

Not for me the wisdom and dedication of
Dr Martin Luther King Jnr
: no. Nor for me the patience and perseverance of
Mahatma Ghandi
: oh, no! I draw inspiration each and every day through watching the apple of my eye bud and blossom into a beautiful, kind and intelligent young person.
Back last summer, I watched someone struggle with a challenge. This young person had to perform at the Royal Albert Hall and they were worried. In fact, they were scared, terrified even. Yet, with a
mountain of practice
and a
tidal wave of character

they overcame their fear, taking to the stage and

taking the crowd by storm
.
Discourse Markers: Linking Sentences
Back last summer
, I watched someone struggle with a challenge. This young person had to perform at the Royal Albert Hall and they were worried.
In fact
, they were scared, terrified even.
Yet
, with a mountain of practice and a tidal wave of character they overcame their fear, taking to the stage and taking the crowd by storm.
Discourse Markers: Linking Paragraphs
Well, if I may, I would like to begin by sharing with you
an inspiring event.


Back last summer
, I watched someone struggle with a challenge.




So, who is this person who inspires me more than any other? It’s my little girl, my daughter, my Amelie.
Let me explain.

Not for me

the wisdom and dedication of Dr Martin Luther King Jnr:


Your Go
One minute to think about your writing; two minutes to talk about it.

Timed Writing
You have five minutes to complete your conclusion
Green Pen Marking
Underline the ATRAPPERISEE methods and circle any errors in your conclusion.
Peer Assessment
Swap with your shoulder partner and green pen mark each other writing, whilst you teacher helps with any circled errors.
If you're satisfied...
... you need to write your final piece up in neat. Make sure that it's beautiful.
Cold Task
‘Greed, selfishness and materialism – we see more and more acts of thoughtlessness towards other people every day.’

Write the text of a speech for a debate at your school or college in which you persuade young people to take more responsibility for each other.

(24 marks for content and organisation
16 marks for technical accuracy)
[40 marks]

Highlight or underline the most important elements of the task.
A TRAPPER I SEE:
Anecdotes
Triplets
Rhetorical questions
Assertions
Personal pronouns
Possessive pronouns
Emotive language
Repetition
Imperatives
Statistics
Expert opinion
Exaggeration.
Cold Task

Greed, selfishness and materialism – we see more and more acts of thoughtlessness towards other people every day.’

Write the text of a speech for a debate at
your school
or college in which you
persuade

young people
to take more responsibility for each other.

(24 marks for
content
and
organisation
16 marks for
technical accuracy
)
[40 marks]

A TRAPPER I SEE:
Anecdotes
Triplets
Rhetorical questions
Assertions
Personal pronouns
Possessive pronouns
Emotive language
Repetition
Imperatives
Statistics
Expert opinion
Exaggeration.
Key Phrase
You need to always write the key phrase at the top of your answer paper.

Persuade

young people to take more responsibility for each other.

Write this down.

A TRAPPER I SEE:
Anecdotes
Triplets
Rhetorical questions
Assertions
Personal pronouns
Possessive pronouns
Emotive language
Repetition
Imperatives
Statistics
Expert opinion
Exaggeration.
Your Learning Journey
Read back through your successes and areas for improvement in your red books.
What have you done well at?
What do you need to work on?
How are you going to achieve this?

I'll be testing you in five minutes.


A TRAPPER I SEE:
Anecdotes
Triplets
Rhetorical questions
Assertions
Personal pronouns
Possessive pronouns
Emotive language
Repetition
Imperatives
Statistics
Expert opinion
Exaggeration.
Persuasive Writing
Objective One: you are going to use as many ATRAPPERISEE methods as possible to respond to this task.

Objective Two: you are going to develop ways to organise your writing for effect.

anecdote
tricolon/triplet
rhetorical question
assertion
personal pronoun
possessive pronoun
emotive language
imperatives
statistics
expert opinion
exaggeration
Tricolon
Rhetorical Question
Assertion
Personal and Possessive Pronouns
Emotive Language
Repetition
Imperatives
Statistics
Expert Opinion
Exaggeration (Hyperbole)
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