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Descriptive Writing lesson 3

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Louise Kelly

on 9 July 2013

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Descriptive Writing Lesson 3
Lesson Objective:
To continue to work on MASSIVE acronym to write descriptively.
Sentence Variety
Make sure you use all three types of sentences to add interest and create specific effects for your reader.
Write a paragraph describing person using all types of sentence.
It should have a simple sentence, then a compound sentence, then a complex sentence and finished with another simple sentence.
So far we have looked at Metaphors, Adjectives and Similes.
Simple sentences contain one idea. Eg. I walked to the park.
Compound sentences join two or more ideas using connectives/conjunctions Eg. I walked to the park and went on the swings.
Complex sentences use subordinate clauses to add extra information. Eg. I walked to the park, a small island of calm, and went on the swings.
Read the example below. How has the author used images to make the place being described come alive in the reader’s imagination?

Strolling along the promenade was always a special thrill. I loved the familiar sights - the white houses and hotels along the front, the shelters occupied by little old ladies, the beach and the ravenous pleading gulls that circled above it. My mother would stand by the seafront railings and inhale great lungs full of sea air and cry "Oh, smell that sea air - the sea never smells as good anywhere else as it does here.”
The sticks of rock that we all sucked, were like barbers’ poles made of sugar...

Written work can be let down by not using a wide enough range of vocabulary.

We can rely on words like ‘nice’ to describe things when more often than
not there are many better alternatives.

Can you think of a better alternative for each of these words?
Think of at least 5 alternatives.
Planning your piece
You are going to create a grid containing details of a beach scene/
This grid will have 6 boxes; one for each sense and one for the 5 W's.
The 5 Ws are:
Where? (the exact place)
When? (Time of year and time of day)
Weather? (Is it hot and sunny or freezing cold and snowing?)
Who? (Create a name for the person describing the scene)
Why? (What is this person doing there?)

The Beach
As Malcolm took his first tentative steps into the Atlantic Ocean the frothy surf tickled his toes. Over his head, in the vast blue sky, screaming gulls swooped and dived. The precious sea danced and glittered in the sunlight like an ocean of diamonds. Although it was only 11am the sun was already blazing and its fierce rays beat down upon his pale naked flesh. As he waded out into the icy water he became aware of the faint smell of burning wood. Smoke drifted from a small fire at the end of the beach where the waves crashed against the black rocks that jutted out into the open sea. He would explore the rocks tomorrow. Today his playground would be the ocean.

What MASSIVE devices can you spot in the description?

Now it's your turn
Make sure you plan your description using the grid
Use MASSIVE techniques
Do not start telling a story just describe the place
Use the senses & the 5Ws
Don’t forget capital letters / full stops / commas / exclamation marks / colon / semi-colon / apostrophes
When you have finished check your work carefully
Make sure that you paragraph your work
Any speech needs to be in speech marks “ ”
If you make a spelling mistake, put one line through the word then write it again
Be as neat as possible
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