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Writing an Interview Narrative

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Robin Meyers

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Interview Narrative English 9
Revising and Editing
Take 5 minutes or so to read through your entire rough draft and the comments I have given you. This will help you figure out what you need to focus on in the revision process.
Assignment Personal Narrative?
The focus of your interview will be to find out about a person’s overall experience during high school, and to present at least one important incident during that time that influenced the interviewee’s coming of age.

Assignment Timeline

Due October 16/17 Assigned as Homework

October 21/22

October 23/24 in Library emailed to:

To share a true personal experience with others through writing

Brainstorming Topics
We will complete several free writes to help us narrow down a topic for our personal narrative.

For each free write, write as much as you can during the time given to you.

Don't worry about spelling, grammar, or puntcuation. Just write!
Free Write #2
Tip for writing...

Your topic does not need to be a complicated one. In fact, a short trip or a simple event can often make the greatest story. Think about important experiences that took place within a short period of time--a day, an hour, or even just a few minutes.

Share the topic you've chosen to write about with the class.
Share Out
Who? What? Where? When?
Answer these questions about your topic:

WHO? --> Questions about the people in your story, such as "who took part in this event?" "Who caught my attention during this experience?"

WHAT? --> Questions that get at sensory details, such as "what did I hear (including dialogue), see, smell, feel, or taste?"

WHERE? --> Questions about pleaces, such as "where did this event/experience take place?"

HOW? --> Questions about feelings, such as "How did I feel watching this event?" Or, "How did I feel during this experience?"
Word Choice: Show, Don't Tell
Imagine this: The flu prevents you from going to your team's big championship game. Later, when you ask your friend how the game was, she replies, "It was fun. We won" That's it? you think.

What you really want is a dazzling description. You want to hear the stomping of the crowd's feet, smell the sweat of the packed gym, and sense the thrill of cheering your team on to victory. You want your friend to show you the victory, not tell you, "we won."

But how can you show rather than tell?...
There are several ways to show an event rather than tell it:

Dialogue: actual words of the people involved in the events.
example - "Who won the game?" asked Max.
"We did." I replied.

Precise Words: strong verbs, vivid adjectives, precise nouns
example - The grey-haired woman wore a long red coat that smelled of campfire smoke and old coffee.

Figurative Speech: expressions that describe one thing in terms of another, such as similes and metaphors.
- Simile: uses "like" or "as" to compare two unlike things.
example - The runner looked as graceful as a cheetah.
- Metaphor: says directly that one thing is another thing.
example - Her eyes were a well of disappointment.

Example: Show vs. Tell
Betsy is a clumsy girl.

Betsy usually trips through a doorway, her arms flailing toward any object that might keep her from falling. "My mom keeps telling me to wear more sensible shoes," she says to cover up the near fall. She then teeters along, looking like a flamingo with a twisted ankle.

Now you try it!
1. Make a quick bullet list of 5 major events or details about your own story.

2. Change those events from "telling" to "showing."

*Remember the strategies: use dialogue, use precise words, use figures of speech...
Leads: introducing your story
The first paragraph should capture your audience’s interest and introduce your story. There are several different ways to do this:

Typical: It was a day at the end of June. My mom, dad, brother, and I were at our camp on Rangeley Lake. We arrived the night before at 10:00, so it was dark when we got there and unpacked. We went straight to bed, the next morning, when I was eating breakfast, my dad started yelling for me from down at the dock at the top of his lungs. He said there was a car in the lake.
Action: A main character doing something.

I gulped my milk, pushed away from the table, and bolted out of the kitchen, slamming the broken screen door behind me. I ran down to our dock as fast as my legs could carry me. My feet pounded on the old wood, hurrying me toward my dad's voice. "Scott!" he bellowed again.
"Coming, Dad!" I gasped. I couldn't see him yet--just the sails of the boats that had already put out into the lake for the day.
Dialogue: A character or characters speaking.

"Scott!" Get down here on the double!" Dad bellowed. His voice sounded far away.
"Dad?" I hollered. "Where are you?" I squinted through the screen door but couldn't see him.
"I'm down on the dock. MOVE IT. You're not going to believe this," he replied.

Reaction: A character thinking.

I couldn't imagine why my father was hollering for me at 7:00 in the morning. I thought fast about what I might have done to get him so riled. Had he found out about the way I talked to my mother the night before, when we got to camp and she asked me to help unpack the car? Before I could consider a third possibility, Dad's voice shattered my thoughts.
"Scott! Move it! You're not going to believe this!"
Get Feedback
1. Get into a group of three.

2. In your groups, share your introductions. Each person gets 5 minutes to share their introductions and get feedback about which one is the most effective.

3. Repeat
Putting Events In Order
Before you begin writing your rough draft, you need to lay out your story by making a list of all the events that happened in chronological order.

For example:
- Woke up at 4:30 AM
- Got in the car at 5:00
- Watched the sunrise on my drive to Minneapolis
- Parked the car
- Stretched at the starting line
- The gun went off, and the race began
- Before I knew it, 5 miles had passed
- I saw my parents on the sideline
- The finish line was just up the hill
- I finished the race

Adding Details to events
Once you have completed your list, add some quick details that you think would help to explain each of your events to your reader.

How can you show and not tell?

What sensory details can you use?

For example:
- Woke up at 4:30 AM
(the morning sun hadn't even started rising yet, I could smell coffee brewing downstairs, I could hear my parents getting ready).
- Got in the car at 5:00
(had my bowl of oatmeal in hand, crawled in the back seat with a blanket, a bottle of water, and my iPod).
- Watched the sunrise on our drive to Minneapolis
(as we got closer, the sun started rising over the lush cornfields of green).
- Parked the car
(the smell of asphalt and exhaust indicated that we had indeed made it to the heart of the city).
- Stretched at the starting line
(Photographers in bright yellow shirts ran around snapping photos and asking for bib numbers amidst all of the chaos, my stomach was in knots at the sight of the starting line, the runners around me seemed like old pros, i felt overwhelmed and alone, I was second guessing myself).
Using Transitions
As you begin writing your rough draft, you will need to keep in mind the use of transitions.

Transitions are words or phrases that connect ideas. Transitions help you understand how all of the ideas in a piece of writing fit together. They make your writing flow smoothly, making your story easier to understand.

Transitional words for showing time:
about after at at last before during eventually finally first second
third immediately later meanwhile next
often soon then thereafter until
when while

*don't be afraid to search Google for additional
transitional words and phrases

Structuring Your Story
Writing Your Rough Draft

Use what you have brainstormed and created during the pre-writing steps for this essay to create a complete rough
draft of your personal narrative.

This includes:
Your introduction paragraph
The middle part of your story
events of your story in chronological order
Sensory details
Answering the 5 W's (who, what, where, when)
Showing, not telling
Answering the question: What did you learn from your experience/how has it changed you?
Use of transitions throughout


Focusing on Your Conclusion
The final paragraph of your narrative needs to tell what you have learned, or how you have changed due to your experience.

Your goal is to leave your reader with an understanding of the importance of the event in your life.
We are going to read a complete personal narrative.
I want you to focus on how the conclusion tells what the writer has learned from their experience.
How can you create this type of conclusion for your own narrative?
Let's look at an example.
Middle Paragraphs
By the end of bike camp, I decided that I was wrong about little kids. Kenny taught me that I should give them a break--and maybe some answers, too. The kids at camp learned a lot, but so did I. Now I can’t wait for next year’s camp.

Now that you've seen an example, write a conclusion paragraph for your own story that tells what you learned, or how you changed due to your experience. Add this conclusion to your full rough draft.
After you have completed your full draft, please follow the steps of the rainbow revision below.
(You can find a link to these rainbow revision steps in Moodle under the Narrative Writing category)

When you have finished the rainbow revision, turn your complete draft in to your basket.
Using Sensory Details
Have you included enough sensory details?
You have included enough sensory details if they help your readers use their imaginations--and their five senses--to fully understand your experience.

How do you do this?

Let’s watch this video to find out how to revise your draft to add more sensory details.

How do you show, not tell?
This is taking details to the next level. "Showing, not telling" can often be confusing, but this video gives good explanation.

Revise for Details
Review your paper's details...
Have you included a variety of sensory details?
Do your details bring your narrative to life for your readers?
Do your details show, instead of tell?

Add more details into your writing using the same strategies as the writer from the video.

What's a transition?
Transition words
can help move the reader through your story without getting "lost". Think of them as directions on a road map. Here are some transition words that show time:
first while meanwhile soon
then second then today
later next third when
tomorrow afterward as soon as

Let's watch another video to learn more:
Add transitions to your own writing!
Make sure that you used transitions to move your reader easily through your story. Reread your narrative and add transitions between each event in your story, just as we saw in the video.

Again, here are some examples:

first while meanwhile soon
then second then today
later next third when
tomorrow afterward as soon as

Individual Feedback
Meet with me to get individual feedback on your narrative. There will be time in class for this, as well as opportunities after school. I want to talk to you about how your are doing with this, and I'd like to give you the chance to ask me questions.

Free Write #3

6 Traits of Writing
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