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Ten Commandments of Writing
Thou shalt:
1. A- attack the prompt.
2. B- brainstorm: build relationships by gathering and grouping.
3. C- construct a thesis, parallel in structure.
4. follow Say Show So: claim, evidence, commentary.
5. write in correct verb tense: literature= present/ history= past.
6. write in complete sentences.
7. use active sentences whenever possible.
8. agree in number, between subject/ verb, between pronoun/antecedent.
9. proofread your work: grammar and spell check/ read out loud.
10. highlight (blue, yellow, green) SSS: claim, evidence, commentary.
SAY
(
Claim
)
SHOW
(
Evidence
)
*To quote, use
TIE
(
T
ag,
I
ntroduce,
E
mbed)
SO
...what? (
Commentary
)
*Connect to Thesis, Make Larger Connection/Greater Implication, Draw A Conclusion, Complete the circle back to your intro hook (quote, story, fact, etc)


Team Two- sad face-
deduct 300 points
2,4

Team One is Cute- Add 300 Points
1,3
(Type the question for 5,2 here.)?
Team Two is cute- add 300 points
5,2
1.In his farewell address to the army, the general praised his soldiers for their unsurpassed courage and thanked them for their devotion.
In his farewell address to the army,
the general praised his
soldiers for their unsurpassed
courage and gave thanks because
of their devotion.
4,4
Thank us for the invitation
Before Dr. Monroe began her presentation,
she took a moment to introduce herself, list
her qualifications, and thanking us for the invitation.
3,3
Checking the oil
Car owners understand the importance
of keeping tires inflated, filling the gas tank,
and to check the oil.
3,1
Taking notes
The process of evaluating a television
documentary includes watching, listening, and to
take notes.
1,2
(Type the question for 4,2 here.)?
Team One- Not so fast- Deduct
300 points
4,2
We must either raise revenues or reduce expenses.
We must either raise revenues or it will
be necessary to reduce expenses.
3,4
Parallel
The heroine of the play persuades her brothers
to mortgage the farm, to invest in more
land, and to repair the house.
2,2
To make posters
The student council needs volunteers to bring
refreshments, to decorate, and for
making posters.
2,1
studying
After school, John’s chores are cleaning his room,
doing the dishes, and to study.
Row 1, Col 1
The setting
In our class discussion of The Scarlet Letter,
we discussed the imagery, the symbolism,
and where the novel was set.
5,4
The Johnson’s were cheerful, knowledgeable, and generous traveling companions.
The Johnson’s were cheerful and
knowledgeable traveling companions,
and behaved generously.
5,3
Raising funds
Some goals of the group are building membership,
encouraging change, and to raise
funds.
5,1
The gyrocompass not only points to true north at all times, but also is unaffected by external magnetic fields.
The gyrocompass not only points to true
north at all times, it is unaffected
by external magnetic fields.
4,3
A company is responsible not only to its shareholders but also to its customers and employees.
A company is not only responsible to its
shareholders but also customers
and employees as well.
4,1
Parallel
At tennis camp, I had three goals: perfect my serve,
improve my backhand, and win
more matches.
3,2
dancing
Many talented performers enjoy
acting, singing, and to dance.
2,3
parallel
The travelers decided that hiking into the Grand Canyon
would be good exercise and
that driving by it would be boring.
1,4
100
500
500
500
500
100
200
400
200
300
300
300
EL
LL
A
Par
400
300
400
400
200
200
100
100
Choose the better thesis. If you think the better one can still be improved, offer a suggestion.
1. directly answers the question asked of you


2. clear statement: answers “How” or “Why”


3. Arguable position: addresses “Who cares?”


4. is a precise roadmap telling your reader the points you will make (usually 3-5)
The thesis statement usually appears at the end of the first paragraph of a paper.


*For a timed writing you may skip the introduction and begin with your thesis.
People who listen to rap music should be fined because _____X_____, ___Y________, and __________Z________.
3. Arguable position
2. clear statement
1. directly answers the question asked of you
What are the Characteristics of a strong thesis statement?
So what are the four characteristics of a strong thesis?
4. is a precise roadmap telling your reader not only the points you will make (usually 3-5), but also the order in which you will make them
Through its contrasting river and shore scenes, Twain's Huckleberry Finn suggests that to find the true expression of American democratic ideals, one must leave "civilized" society and go back to nature.
Better
Does my thesis pass the ‘Who cares?' test? If a reader's first response is, “Who cares?" then you need to clarify, to forge a relationship, or to connect to a larger issue.
Ask yourself
People who commit crimes should be punished.
Evaluate
Have I taken a position that others might challenge or oppose? Thesis statements that are too vague often do not have a strong argument. If your thesis contains words like "good" or "successful," see if you could be more specific: Why is something "good"; What makes something "successful"?

Does my thesis pass the how or why test? If a reader's first response is "how? or why? your thesis may be too open-ended and lack guidance for the reader. See what you can add to give the reader a better take on your position right from the beginning.
Not sure?
Do I answer the question?

Circle the verbs
Box the subject
Underline the nouns
Double Check:

Write the portion of your thesis that reveals the roadmap (x,y,z):
Love Orange
Evaluate whether or not emotions and intellect contribute to success in sports, or are physical attributes and skills all that matter?
Write a thesis for the following:
Sadly, using force is the best way to solve a great many of the world’s problems.
Sadly, when all other means have failed, force should be applied to stop intolerable abuse.
Examine whether or not the use of force is ever a way to resolve conflict.
I think that increasing government funding for school arts programs is a fabulous idea.
If people want a nation of dull, narrow-minded, and uninspired citizens, then undoubtedly the government must cut spending on school arts programs.
Explain whether or not our government spend more or less money on school programs in the arts.
Mark Twain's Huckleberry Finn is a great American novel.
Strong or Weak?
While both sides fought the Civil War over the issue of slavery, the North fought for moral reasons while the South fought to preserve its own institutions.
Better
Compare and contrast the reasons why the North and South fought the Civil War.

The North and South fought the Civil War for many reasons, some of which were the same and some different.
Strong or Weak?
Explain why the boys in William Golding’s Lord of the Flies need face paint to do evil deeds.
Circle the verbs
Box the subject
Underline the nouns
Let’s Play a Game!
Place a checkmark next to the strongest thesis.
Medical and social benefits dictate that all students should take physical education classes.
All students need to start a healthy habit that will last a lifetime.
Discuss whether or not physical fitness classes should be required of all students.
Choose the better thesis. If you think the better one can still be improved, offer a suggestion.
So what are the four characteristics of a strong thesis?
The thesis statement usually, but not always, appears at the end of the first paragraph of a paper.


*For a timed writing you may skip the hook and begin with your thesis.
3. Interesting/Arguable position
What are the Characteristics of a strong thesis statement?
1. answers prompt: attack the prompt


2. specific statement: answers “How” or “Why”


3. Arguable position: addresses “Who cares?”


4. precise roadmap telling your reader the points you will make (usually 3-5)
“A dad is someone who wants to catch you before you fall but instead picks you up, brushes you off, and lets you try again...shines with pride when you succeed, and has faith in you even when you fail...” (-Unknown). Although the powerful wizard
Gandalf
in J.R.R. Tolkien’s
The Hobbit
, or
There and Back Again
, is not actually the father of the main character, Bilbo Baggins, he
exhibits
these
fatherly qualities
.
Through Gandalf’s guidance, encouragement, and protection
,
Bilbo
, a timid hobbit who, at the beginning of the fantasy novel, is content with his routine and less-than-noteworthy lifestyle,
discovers a sense of adventure and bravery
he did not know he had in him. Therefore,
The Hobbit
, as seen through an analytical lens, is a three hundred six-long page
metaphor for a child growing up.


4. roadmap
telling your reader the points you will be making (in the order in which you will make them).
Through its contrasting river and shore scenes, Twain's Huckleberry Finn suggests that to find the true expression of American democratic ideals, one must leave "civilized" society and go back to nature.
Better
People who commit crimes should be punished.
Evaluate
Have I taken a position that others might challenge or oppose? Thesis statements that are too vague often do not have a strong argument. If your thesis contains words like "good" or "successful," see if you could be more specific: Why is something "good"; What makes something "successful"?

Does my thesis pass the
how
or
why
or (occasionally
what
) test? If a reader's first response is "
how
?" or "
why
?" your thesis may be too open-ended and lack guidance for the reader. See what you can add to give the reader a better take on your position right from the beginning.
Not sure?
2. specific statement
Did I attack the prompt?

Circle the predicate(s)
Box the subject(s)/or object(s)
Underline the key words

Draw the symbol or
define the word
above the predicate(s)
Double Check:
1. answers the prompt
Let’s Play a Game!
Place a check mark next to the strongest thesis.

Write the portion of your thesis that reveals the road map:
The Last Book in the Universe
Evaluate whether or not emotions and intellect contribute to success in sports, or are physical attributes and skills all that matter?
Write a thesis for the following:
Sadly, using force is the best way to solve a great many of the world’s problems.
Sadly, when all other means have failed, force should be applied to stop intolerable abuse.
Examine whether or not the use of force is ever a way to resolve conflict.
Does my thesis pass the "Who cares?"test? If a reader's first response is, “Who cares?" then you need to clarify, to forge a deeper relationship, or to connect to a larger issue.
Ask yourself
Mark Twain's Huckleberry Finn is a great American novel.
Strong or Weak?
While both sides fought the Civil War over the issue of slavery, the North fought for moral reasons while the South fought to preserve its own institutions.
Better
Compare the reasons why the North and South fought the Civil War.

The North and South fought the Civil War for many reasons, some of which were the same and some of which were different.
Strong or Weak?
Discuss the reasons for the increase in the high school drop out rate.
Circle the predicate
Box the subject /object
Underline the key words
define predicate
Medical and social benefits dictate that all students should take physical education classes, but the student should be financially responsible for the cost of the course.
All students need to start a healthy habit that will last a lifetime.
Discuss whether or not physical fitness classes should be required of all students.
I think that increasing government funding for school arts programs is a fabulous idea.
If people want a nation of dull, narrow-minded, and uninspired citizens, then undoubtedly the government must cut spending on school arts programs.
Explain whether or not our government spend more or less money on school programs in the arts.
To integrate a quotation properly within a paragraph, a good writer usually writes one sentence to introduce the quotation, a second sentence that includes the quotation, and a third sentence to comment on the significance of the quotation. Here are some examples:
Bad TIE: The narrator says, "Who can even imagine me looking a strange white man in the eye?" (232)

Good TIE:
The narrator asks if anyone could imagine her "looking a strange white man in the eye" (232).
Bad TIE
There is only one exception to divorce. This is shown in the quote “except in…”
Good TIE
Divorce is not allowed “except in the case of adultery or insufferable perverseness” (More 3)
Quotations should blend with your writing: Without looking at the writing, a listener should not be able to tell where the writer's (your) words end, and the quote begins.
So how do you blend quotes? Blend Quotes with
TIE.
It's like figuring out the best moment to merge lanes.







T
ag: Quote + Your writing
"Brute," Holden mutters as he leaves the compound where he and Ameera have spent many happy hours.

I
ntroduce: Your Writing + Quote
As Holden leaves the compound where he and Ameera have spent many happy hours, he mutters, "brute."

E
mbed: Your Writing + Quote+ Your Writing
Holden mutters "brute" as he leaves the compound where he and Ameera have spent many happy hours.


The main character experiences her own grandma pass away right in front of her and simply offers her an “orange,” or her love, to her. “And in leaving my grandmother’s house, the dark tunnel of my childhood, I slammed the car door hard on my fingers and as my hand closed over the breaking bones, felt nothing.” The feeling of "nothing" mirrors the emptiness she feels inside.
You Try:
At the end of the story when the main character’s grandmother is passing away she tells her grandmother she could have her whole orange. “Grandma,” I said quickly, searching for something to say, something that would save her, “Grandma, you can have my whole orange,” and placed it in the bed besides her hand. But she kept dying and I knew then that the orange had no potency, that love could not create miracles. This was when the author shows the main character’s loss of innocence.
You Try:
Lady Macbeth’s soliloquy demonstrates her determination to accomplish royal murder, her ambition to gain royal power. She calls on hell’s own demons with the plea “Come … spirits,” to prevent her “blood” from allowing any pity for the murder victims to enter her soul. She commands the demons to “unsex” her and remove her feminine instincts while filing her with “direst cruelty” so that she can commit the murder without remorse or guilt. Finally, Lady Macbeth orders the night to shroud her in such darkness that she cannot see the fatal wound she inflicts nor should “heaven [be able to] peep through the blanket of darkness” to discover her deeds. Lady Macbeth’s indomitable will sets Macbeth on the irreversible course toward destruction and downfall with her haughty and demanding words.
Mrs. Peters sometimes appears to be almost supernatural. For example, Glaspell describes her "look of seeing into things, of seeing through a thing to something else . . ." (333). However, this "look" really demonstrates a sense of intuition rather than any magical powers.

Borrowed from L. Boyd, winter 1996.
ORIGINAL: That look of seeing into things, of seeing through a thing to something else, was in the eyes of the sheriff's wife now.
Bad TIE: At one point the mother says, "I used to think [Dee] hated Maggie, too" (233).


Good TIE:
At one point the mother admits that she "used to think [Dee] hated Maggie, too" (233).
Quote just thrown in: Personification helps her express how she is really feeling. “…a heart can hallucinate if it’s completely starved for love…” This shows that she is lonely.

TIE: Jewel realizes that because she “wanted desperately to belong,” she allows herself to “hallucinate,” twisting the truth to fit her desires.
"Of the more than 1000 bicycling deaths each year, three-fourths are caused by head injuries. Half of those killed are school-age children. One study concluded that wearing a bike helmet can reduce the risk of head injury by 85 percent. In an accident, a bike helmet absorbs the shock and cushions the head." From "Bike Helmets: Unused Lifesavers," Consumer Reports (May 1990): 348.
Paraphrase, then summarize
Quote only sentences, passages, or words that are especially succinct, memorable, or powerful. Save direct quotations for brilliant comments, controversial statements, certain statistics, insightful literary analysis, and personal testimony that you believe will strengthen your argument.
Let’s talk about Quotes
She knew that with her love orange, Miss Aggie would be at peace and in a better place. “I knew that if I gave her my orange to take to the unknown with her, it would be safe.” The main character believed her orange would protect her; her love would keep anything way. Her love provided safety and love toward Miss Aggie because that’s what she wanted her love-orange to do.
You Try:
ORIGINAL: The shadow of a cloud moved across the field of grain and she saw the river through the trees.

Hemingway uses the image of a momentary darkness to suggest the woman's growing disillusionment. After her quarrel with the man, "[t]he shadow of a cloud moved across the field of grain . . ." (21). A similar shadow gradually develops over their relationship.
Ex: “Come unsex me” (You aren’t Lady Macbeth)
…come unsex [her]…

Quotes should be grammatically consistent with the rest of your writing. If punctuation, pronouns, and verb tenses don't flow with your own words, paraphrase and cite the needed material, or make minor changes within the quotation, surrounding them with brackets [ ].
"Matisse is the best painter ever at putting the viewer at the scene. He's the most realistic of all modern artists, if you admit the feel of the breeze as necessary to a landscape and the smell of oranges as essential to a still life. "The Casbah Gate" depicts the well-known gateway Bab el Aassa, which pierces the southern wall of the city near the sultan's palace. With scrubby coats of ivory, aqua, blue, and rose delicately fenced by the liveliest gray outline in art history, Matisse gets the essence of a Tangier afternoon, including the subtle presence of the bowaab, the sentry who sits and surveys those who pass through the gate." From Peter Plagens, "Bright Lights." Newsweek (26 March 1990): 50
Paraphrase, then summarize

Paraphrase: your words, all the content
Summarize: your words, shorter than the original because it addresses key points, ideas, etc.
For everything else, Paraphrase or Summarize
Old House in My Fortieth Year

by Gary Soto  

The clod’s stubbornness gives in to my fist.
The snail groans a single bubble under my shoe
The roots of every chinaberry
I’ve swung from Needle even further into the moist earth.
I’m home in these weeds.
I’m home in these bones,
This flesh with its laughter and fatherly scent,
Flesh held up by a frayed belt on its last hole.
I don’t have to walk far to hear the jay
Or a vicious dog, a coal breathing in each eye.  
The old house has been smoothed by sand
And the rake of years. I don’t know this place,
Really, or the boy buried in this flesh of mine.
One error, and I’m the man pushing a cart.
Another error, and I march a long row of cotton
Or beets. The stars wheeled around an icy comet,
And by fortune, I’m now at home in this body—
The heart down to business
And slapping blood through its swinging door.
INTEGRATING QUOTES PRACTICE   Read the following poem by Gary Soto. Then, in your small group, write a paragraph discussing the symbolic value of the poem’s images.
 
Exercise in using Supporting
Evidence
write a paragraph supporting one of your pieces of evidence. Use the back side of the thesis paper.

Be sure to TIE quotes.
Using the thesis you wrote for Love Orange


You choose two types of evidence.
Some period of service to our country, military or otherwise, should be required of all young Americans.
Use: story and quote
Pain and suffering build character. Support or refute this statement.

Use: example and fact
Cats are better pets than dogs.


Use: comparison and statistic


Natural Christmas trees are better than artificial ones.

first place 10 pts
second place 9 pts
third place 8 pts
4= 7pts
5= 6 pts
6= 5 pts
7=4 pt
8= 3pt
9= 2pts
10= 1pts
In groups of 4, come up with supporting evidence.
Use between
Hour and minute
Chapter and verse
Title and subtitle
After greeting of business letter
Use to mean “note what follows”
Items ex: I’m going to get the following: a carne asada burrito, rice, a root beer drink…
Use before a long, formal statement/ quote (see page 327).
Use before a statement that explains clarifies preceding statement (see page 327).
Colons

Everyone in the class is doing extremely well so I am not worried.
Now You Try

I want two tacos, and he wants a carne asada burrito.

For
And
Nor
But
Or
Yet
So
Exception to pause rule

I heard the movie was good I hope it is.
Now you try
Before we met (pause) I was very lonely.
Before we met is not a sentence- use comma
I just want to know one thing: the truth.
the truth further clarifies (expands on) "one thing" but is not a sentence, use a colon
I am hungry (pause) I think I will eat something.
Both sides of pause are sentences- they are closely related- use semi-colon
He is a nice man: he compliments me frequently.
Second half expands/defines first and both halves are sentences (note h of he is not capitalized)
Examples
When you pause- test each side of the pause to see if you have a sentence on each side.
If only one side is a sentence, put a comma in the spot where you paused.
If both sides are sentences, you may
use
a period/ capital letter
a semi-colon/lower case letter if the sentences are closely related
a colon if the second sentence is an explanation of the first
Testing the Pause

I want a carne asada burrito.
Now you try
Does it have a subject (what you are talking about)? I walked home.
Does it have a predicate ( what the subject is doing or just is)? I walked home.
Can it stand alone or are you waiting for more information? --I walked home.
Because I walked home.
Testing for a Sentence
Testing for a Sentence, Commas, Semicolons, FANBOYS and Colons
Test Pauses: Punctuation
The importance of reading books to young children is because it gives them reading skills, teaches, them how to write, and read.
Reading books to young children is important because
it helps their listening skills, makes them good readers, and helps their imagination.
Use Polls everywhere to re-work one thesis
Lists After a Colon

Be sure to keep all the elements in a list in the same form.

Example 1

Not Parallel:
The dictionary can be used for these purposes: to find word meanings, pronunciations, correct spellings, and looking up irregular verbs.
Parallel:
The dictionary can be used for these purposes: to find word meanings, pronunciations, correct spellings, and irregular verb
Not Parallel:
The salesman expected that he would present his product at the meeting, that there would be time for him to show his slide presentation, and that questions would be asked by prospective buyers. (passive)
Parallel:
The salesman expected that he would present his product at the meeting, that there would be time for him to show his slide presentation, and that prospective buyers would ask him questions.
Not Parallel:
The teacher said that he was a poor student because he waited until the last minute to study for the exam, completed his lab problems in a careless manner, and his motivation was low.
Parallel:
The teacher said that he was a poor student because he waited until the last minute to study for the exam, completed his lab problems in a careless manner, and lacked motivation.
Not Parallel:
The production manager was asked to write his report quickly, accurately, and in a detailed manner.

Parallel:
The production manager was asked to write his report quickly, accurately, and thoroughly.
Not Parallel:
Mary likes hiking, swimming, and to ride a bicycle.
Parallel:
Mary likes hiking, swimming, and riding a bicycle.
Parallel structure means using the same pattern of words, parts of speech and/or word endings, for words, phrases, or clauses joined by a conjunction like “and” or “or,” to show that two or more ideas have the same level of importance.
-Adapted from Purdue OWL
The importance of reading books to young children are it develops their brain faster, they get a love for reading and they have easier time in their english classes.
Reading books to young children is important for the reasons that it can build their imagination, build their knowledge, and it could develop their speaking.


Proofreading Strategies for Parallelism:

Skim your paper, pausing at the words "and" and "or." Check on each side of these words to see whether the items joined are parallel. If not, make them parallel.
If you have several items in a list, put them in a column to see if they are parallel.
Listen to the sound of the items in a list or the items being compared. Do you hear the same kinds of sounds? For example, is there a series of "-ing" words beginning each item? Or do your hear a rhythm being repeated? If something is breaking that rhythm or repetition of sound, check to see if it needs to be made parallel.

-All text taken from Purdue OWL
Not Parallel:
The coach told the players that they should get a lot of sleep, that they should not eat too much, and to do some warm-up exercises before the game.
Parallel:
The coach told the players that they should get a lot of sleep, that they should not eat too much, and that they should do some warm-up exercises before the game.
— or —
Parallel:
The coach told the players that they should get a lot of sleep, not eat too much, and do some warm-up exercises before the game.
Clauses

A parallel structure that begins with clauses must keep on with clauses. Changing to another pattern or changing the voice of the verb (from active to passive or vice versa) will break the parallelism.
Words and Phrases

With the -ing form (gerund) of words:

Parallel: Mary likes hiking, swimming, and bicycling.

With infinitive phrases:

Parallel: Mary likes to hike, to swim, and to ride a bicycle.
OR
Mary likes to hike, swim, and ride a bicycle.
Parallel Structure
Parallelism
Hosted
by
Mrs. Zeko


Team Two- sad face-
deduct 300 points
2,4

Team One is Cute- Add 300 Points
1,3
1.In his farewell address to the army, the general praised his soldiers for their unsurpassed courage and thanked them for their devotion.
In his farewell address to the army,
the general praised his
soldiers for their unsurpassed
courage and gave thanks because
of their devotion.
4,4
Thank us for the invitation
Before Dr. Monroe began her presentation,
she took a moment to introduce herself, list
her qualifications, and thanking us for the invitation.
3,3
Parallel
The heroine of the play persuades her brothers
to mortgage the farm, to invest in more
land, and to repair the house.
2,2
studying
After school, John’s chores are cleaning his room,
doing the dishes, and to study.
Row 1, Col 1
The setting
In our class discussion of The Scarlet Letter,
we discussed the imagery, the symbolism,
and where the novel was set.
5,4
The Johnson’s were cheerful, knowledgeable, and generous traveling companions.
The Johnson’s were cheerful and
knowledgeable traveling companions,
and behaved generously.
5,3
(Type the question for 5,2 here.)?
Team Two is cute- add 300 points
5,2
The gyrocompass not only points to true north at all times, but also is unaffected by external magnetic fields.
The gyrocompass not only points to true
north at all times, it is unaffected
by external magnetic fields.
4,3
A company is responsible not only to its shareholders but also to its customers and employees.
A company is not only responsible to its
shareholders but also customers
and employees as well.
4,1
We must either raise revenues or reduce expenses.
We must either raise revenues or it will
be necessary to reduce expenses.
3,4
Parallel
At tennis camp, I had three goals: perfect my serve,
improve my backhand, and win
more matches.
3,2
Checking the oil
Car owners understand the importance
of keeping tires inflated, filling the gas tank,
and to check the oil.
3,1
dancing
Many talented performers enjoy
acting, singing, and to dance.
2,3
To make posters
The student council needs volunteers to bring
refreshments, to decorate, and for
making posters.
2,1
parallel
The travelers decided that hiking into the Grand Canyon
would be good exercise and
that driving by it would be boring.
1,4
Taking notes
The process of evaluating a television
documentary includes watching, listening, and to
take notes.
1,2
Raising funds
Some goals of the group are building membership,
encouraging change, and to raise
funds.
5,1
(Type the question for 4,2 here.)?
Team One- Not so fast- Deduct
300 points
4,2
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100
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200
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EL
LL
A
Par
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Commandment #7
Active/Passive voice

http://www.shmoop.com/video/active-vs-passive-voice

http://www.shmoop.com/video/cahsee-ela-22-writing-modifiers-and-passive-voice

Active: subject performs action
Passive: subject receives action
Active: John swung the bat.
Passive: The bat was swung by John.
Only use passive if
•you want to emphasize the receiver of action. ex:The mayor was re-elected
•you don’t know, don’t want to reveal performer of action. ex: Vicious rumors have been spread

Quia
1. Thou shalt attack the prompt
Essayer: French, to try
Essai: French, the attempt,
test, examination
B-Brainstorm: Build Relationships between/among the evidence by gathering/grouping. The structure of Brainstorm Depends on the Prompt .
Since
Then
If
This
Leads to
That
If the prompt is in the form of a question, restate it as a statement by putting the question word (What, how. etc) at the end: The characteristics of an effective television newscaster are what.
*Based on the relationship of your gathering & grouping of evidence, identify the type of/structure for your essay.
Who cares?
You use SSS in your daily speech... you just haven't labeled it:
C- Construct a Thesis,
parallel in structure
,

Parallel Structure:
1. Shmoop: http://www.shmoop.com/video/parallelism
2. Jeopardy: Ten Commandments Folder
Make sure thesis is parallel
Commandment#1
Commandment #2
Commandment #3
Commandment #4
Say
,
Show
,
So
=
Claim
,
Evidence
,
Commentary
you already follow this format in conversations with your friends...
Love-Sick Laura: "
He's so cuuuuuuute
!"
Hater Henrieta: "What the?"
Love-Sick Laura: His
eyes are the perfect shade
of chocolate, and when he smiles his nose crinkles
up like a little fuzzy rabbit's nose.

If I were his girlfriend, I'd stare at him all day.

Ever-Eating Edgar: "
Since you don't want your food, I'm going to eat it.
"
Distracted Danny: "What makes you say that?"
Ever-Eating Edgar: "
You always finish all your lunch, but today you still have half a sandwich left, and you didn't even touch your chips.

You must not be hungry. Maybe, you are even love-sick over Laura:)

Commandment # 6
Commandment #5

For English: Write in present tense...Why?
because the story lives on, and can be reread. Even if a character dies, when you reread the story s/he is alive again.
Spaz realizes.... not, Spaz realized...

For History: Write in past tense...Why?
because the events took place in the past, and you can only reread what happened. When a person dies, s/he remains dead (except for eligious beliefs, which is completely off the topic of tense).
Write in complete sentences
How do you know if it's a complete sentence?
See Seven Deadly Sins
for lesson
(How?/Why?)
(Attack the prompt)
See Seven Deadly Sins for Lesson
Commandment #8
Agreement in Tense, Number: s/v and prn/ant
See Seven Deadly Sins: Lack of Agreement

Commandment #9
Proofreadz; Grammar, Spell check,
Read Out Loud
(For Multiple Drafts- Also REVISE

Commandment #10
Highlight
S
S
S
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